String Quartet

Start of string quartet

Would be great to get feedback on the material thats been written so far.

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Well, here are some thoughts:

Soon, it's gonna need a change, or even a new movement to make it suite-like. A critique: The cello things in the beginning are going to be hard, so you should divide that between the 3 parts.

But MY GOD that viola solo at the end there! Violists love to show off............ :musicwhistle:

Very good work, I like the overall sound and color you created. Though in spots, you need to be careful that it doesn't sound like some Egyptian theme that everyone would immediately take it into being.

Great work!

Heckel

Well, here are some thoughts:

Soon, it's gonna need a change, or even a new movement to make it suite-like. A critique: The cello things in the beginning are going to be hard, so you should divide that between the 3 parts.

But MY GOD that viola solo at the end there! Violists love to show off............ :musicwhistle:

Very good work, I like the overall sound and color you created. Though in spots, you need to be careful that it doesn't sound like some Egyptian theme that everyone would immediately take it into being.

Great work!

Heckel

I wouldn't worry really about any Egyptian identification with the theme really. I've listed a few times now and there's really not much Egyptian about it. Nice work, Sofie.

I like it a lot too. It will sound great when it's played by real performers.

Overall, I like this.

I do detect some non-western harmony to it - I felt it was oriental at moments.

Bar 12: I felt there needed to be a crotchet rest after the last inverted root chord

By Bar 13 I'm already getting tired of the main theme, I would perhaps take it down an octave - try to draw more attention to the new theme you're introducing. Also, I think that 8 tremolos in the lower voices is too much, perhaps 4?

I like the slight syncopation in this 2nd section although it seems to just put along rather than push anywhere.

I feel you jump too quickly from this 2nd section back to the main theme. With that raised 7th in the violin theme, I feel you could really create an atmosphere here with it returning over these held notes. There's a hint of a great air to it, if that makes sense.

I like how it builds, we're really heading somewhere big here..

56 onward, there are a lot of instances where the cello would be best in a treble clef.

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Small fragment of a piece, but still a lot in there as far as I'm concerned.. Keep working on it, mate.