"Into the light of his presence"

A peculiar thing about this piece is that it was constructed in a way that it elevates if not matches the meaning of the words drawn into it. In other words, I found a passage from the bible narrowed down by one fellow man who by the way sells liturgical music. I saw the scriptures and immediately I felt identified with it, and I wrote this piece in a effort to gain my faith back on God. I did it in a way that the music would sound melancholic but glorious. The words read as follow:

The eagle of the Alps is sometimes beaten down by the tempest into the narrow defiles of the mountains.

Storm clouds shut in this mighty bird of the forest.

Her efforts to escape seem fruitless.

She dashes to and fro, beating the air with her strong wings,

and waking the mountain echoes with her cries.

At length, with a note of triumph, she darts upward, and, piercing the clouds, is

once more in the clear sunlight.

So we maybe surrounded with difficulties.

We battle with circumstances in vain.

There is one, and but one, way of escape.

The mists and fogs cling to the earth; beyond the clouds God's light is shining.

Into the sunlight of His presence we may rise on the wings of faith.

Concerning the techniques and the structure I pretty much respected the rules in classical writing, but used a irregular form. aABCDA(a)EF

I had lots of obstacles in this piece. Not musical obstacles but obstacles when it came to respect some of the rules like for instance: no parallel 5 and 8.

This is probably not one of my greatest musical accomplishment but it's indeed a piece I put a lot effort into it and dedication. I dedicate this piece to Invisionary.(reason not specified).

Is this supposed to be sung? ;)

Or played?

BEcause the flute goes way too low. but I don't think it matters if this is to be sung.

Is this supposed to be sung? :o

Or played?

BEcause the flute goes way too low. but I don't think it matters if this is to be sung.

It is supposed to be sung by humans

as opposed by dogs? jk

I actually tried to add a lol next to my text

but oh well too late now...

It's a lovely piece. What stands out most to me is it's originality. It has a freshness to it that I don't hear often. Good work, I am on my third or fourth time listening to it now. I can see a mountain in my mind when I listen to it.

The last part says, "Into the sunlight of His presence we may rise on the wings of faith." When I was a young child I was quite tormented in fear of going to hell. Finally I broke down after day in and day out of torment and cried and in that moment I felt the love of God overflow my being and I knew He loved me a sorrowful sinner and I saw a Sun sitting above water. Often when God makes His presence known to me I see that Sun rising in my spirit, and to this day if I see that Sun in my mind sitting above the horizen I cry. He took a tormented child in the darkness and raised him into the sunlight of His presence and gave him peace and security.

But to you who fear My name

The Sun of Righteousness shall arise

With healing in His wings

Malachi 4:2

There are some really, truly marvelous things about this piece. First off, your choral writing is superb. The counterpoint between the women's voices in the first phrase is just exquisite, and the whole piece is worth listening to even just for that. In general, you balance homphony with polyphonic writing very well throughout the piece.

I actually was annoyed by the piano almost uniformly throughout. Not because the piano writing was bad per se -- but because to my ear it just seemed unnecessary, given the beautiful choral writing that was going on. I think part of it is that the piano part was too busy. You have a lot of repeated chords and running lines and it seems like they're just trying to take something that is already good and lovely as it is and 'add' something to it that never needed to be added in the first place.

I think this piece would sound much more convincing if accompanied by a string quartet playing mostly simple, held-out chord tones. But that's just me, and my ear, and after all, the piece is yours.

Again, it's a beautiful work. Great job!

It is a beautiful piece. Although the midi sounds terrible, I see where are you going with this piece. Good luck and keep writing please

It is a beautiful piece. Although the midi sounds terrible, I see where are you going with this piece. Good luck and keep writing please

I agree with my brother (twins) it does sound great.

I don

Thanks I took a look at some of the things you pointed out.

I will elavorate more about my piece later if you give me a chance.

greetings

pst. I wrote these piece after the kyrie.

I have a few suggestions for text setting.

A lot of times, you have text accents in the music that are absolutely unnatural for the English. What I always do when I set a text is look for where the stressed syllables are, and if I come across a place where I want the rhythm to reflect speaking more than even singing, I'll change the meter.

In some places, you have unimportant words on strong beats. This can be alleviated by simply changing meters.

Sorry for taking all this time to answer.

I ll try and see what can I do with it using your advice.

Thanks