Wanted to share my new channel

I am a true free spirit. Being charming, independent, energetic and compassionate. Knowing how to relax, and being perfectly capable of switching from a passionate, driven idealist in the workplace to that imaginative and enthusiastic free spirit on the dance floor, often drives my music with a suddenness that can surprise even their closest friends. 

Being in the mix also gives me a chance to connect emotionally with others through music, giving them cherished insight into what motivates myself, friends and colleagues. Everyone should take the time to recognize and express their feelings, and their empathy and sociability make that a natural conversation topic.

I spend a lot of time exploring feelings and ideas before they find something that rings true becomes a musical melody. I hope to establish a place in this world, through my imagination, empathy and courage are likely to produce incredible sounds and music that resonates with others.

I figured I would start sharing on musical forum first to expose my creations to others with like minds I hope. 

Well my channel is below and feel free to comment or let me know your thoughts.

Thanks in advance.
M

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCtu...BD_CiElj41bd5w

Orchestrational development is pretty okay, though I would be careful about the rule concerning first inversion triads moving to other first inversion triads. It's a rule for a reason and sounds awkward here sometimes.

Harmonic development is a must though. It goes through the same progression way too many times and doesn't even use secondary dominants to major or minor keys. I personally think it's vital for retaining interest for this track considering the feel is relatively laid back.

Cheers!

The inversion thing is a minor point. It doesn't have as big an affect as an academic would lead themself to believe. Looking out for those sorts of things is surely a hallmark of well crafted work, but it doesn't speak much to the more general merits of a piece. This is pretty enough, I do feel like you are going for a style that would benefit from more harmonic variation. It is common for amateur composers to repeat a harmony and "Jam" on it, so to say. However, this is not jazz. It could be jazz, if it was jazzier. Maybe it is jazz, but that would make it pretty crummy jazz. Point is, find some structure and branch out with varied progressions in neighboring key areas to add interest and depth to the piece.