Jared Steven Destro Posted May 22, 2017 Share Posted May 22, 2017 Here is a piece for string quintet that I finished the other day. It is about gloaming, or twilight, and it is my mother's favorite time of day. Let me know your thoughts -- I'm sure I'll have revisions at some point in the future. Enjoy! PDF Rhapsody in F major, Op. 42 - The Gloaming Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jared Steven Destro Posted May 22, 2017 Author Share Posted May 22, 2017 12 minutes ago, ilv said: Good work. A few suggestions: 1. At 0:43, I would not move from a B natural to a C in the harmony. Also applies at 1:38 and 5:41. 2. At would not have a E and an F next to each other (minor second apart). I would take out the F. 3. At 3:28, I wouldn't have a C and a D next to each other (major 2nd apart). I would just have a C. 4. At 3:29, I would remove the G3. Thanks for the suggestions! I rather like the dissonances created by seconds, but I could see how they might not be for everyone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maarten Bauer Posted May 23, 2017 Share Posted May 23, 2017 Nice harmonies! However, I miss a climax that makes the piece more interesting. In my opinion the first minutes sound very interesting, but then it gets too monotonous and I lose my interest. For me the dissonances are fine - I even love them - but a clear climax would improve the music! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jared Steven Destro Posted May 25, 2017 Author Share Posted May 25, 2017 On 5/23/2017 at 8:00 AM, Maarten Bauer said: Nice harmonies! However, I miss a climax that makes the piece more interesting. In my opinion the first minutes sound very interesting, but then it gets too monotonous and I lose my interest. For me the dissonances are fine - I even love them - but a clear climax would improve the music! Thanks, and interesting point about climax. I suppose my justification was in thinking each line (or most, anyway) had a sort of climax (brought on by great emotion etc.). Anyway, thanks a lot for the input! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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