flucold - electric guitar trio

it is my minor trio in adagio tempo.
the theme comes to me while i've been hardly flucolded last winter.
my music's friend was going heaven when i start recording session.
so, it is sudly and fully minor scales occurs.
the melody is helded in tenor mostly.
pls share your thought.

The articulations on some of your notes seem a little off (staccatos). The mixing on the melody is also a bit weird.
The chords should probably change a little bit, though when you do modulate or use a borrowed chord it's well done.
The 7-8 retardation in your melody line is also a little off putting too.
I agree with ilv's comment about the musical setting.

On 22.09.2017 at 8:06 AM, ilv said:

For background purposes, this is awesome. However, as a concert piece, I would want more melodic motion. Also, it would be nice if you added a bass line, perhaps with a bass guitar.

 

thanks for the answer. I do not plan concerts, 'cos i'm one man band )))

I'm glad to hear that this track is suitable for the background, because usually my music is too active for this.

I did not quite understand the comments about the bass line. bass guitar is present throughout the track except for places with a guitar harmonic figure. The bass line is written according to the concept of the general bass.

On 22.09.2017 at 7:16 PM, Monarcheon said:

The articulations on some of your notes seem a little off (staccatos). The mixing on the melody is also a bit weird.
The chords should probably change a little bit, though when you do modulate or use a borrowed chord it's well done.
The 7-8 retardation in your melody line is also a little off putting too.
I agree with ilv's comment about the musical setting.

 

thanks for your comments, they are always relevant and useful. I hear warmly that the modulation is rather rude and inert.