November 15, 20178 yr We're having a ring contest at school, and the winning ring will be the school ring for next month. Everybody except for me suggest their favourite pop "music", but I decided I'll try to make a ring myself. I tried to make something simple that can loop and can be heard alot of times. Ok, it's feedback time.
November 20, 20178 yr Jazzy and relaxed. Probably too relaxed for a school ring, but what do I know about school rings from other countries. I have to say that the partial repetition of the first phrase is harmonically a bit weak, and the ten seconds from 0:11 to 0:21 the better, more fleshed out part (in my purely subjective opinion!). The small forms are often incredibly difficult to write.
November 20, 20178 yr Very jazzy. I disagree with Willibald, I don't think the first phrase is weak at all, in fact I think it sets up the loop pretty well. Although I would recommend extending it past 21 seconds before you loop. It just gives the crowd more to listen to. Nice work!
November 21, 20178 yr Author 5 hours ago, LostSamurai said: Very jazzy. I disagree with Willibald, I don't think the first phrase is weak at all, in fact I think it sets up the loop pretty well. Although I would recommend extending it past 21 seconds before you loop. It just gives the crowd more to listen to. Nice work! Actually I can't expand it XD They said that the offered ring has to be between 15 and 22 seconds long.
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