Soliloquy for Clarinet No. 19

This is my "Soliloquy for Clarinet No. 19". Here is the link to my previous posted soliloquy for clarinet:

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t34671/soliloquy-for-clarinet-no-18/
 

Just a few observations.

• You could do with varying the rhythm more. The vast majority of the piece is either a run of crotchets or a run of semiquavers.
  • By bar 10 I really wanted to hear something other than crotchets. Perhaps dotted crotchet, quaver, crotchet instead.
• Consider the contour of the melody. This resource should be useful.  
• bar 25: it suddenly feels like a completely different piece.
• bar 28: the minim very abruptly kills all the energy which was built up in the preceding few bars
• Watch out with time signatures.
  • bar 6 should be 3/4 then 2/4. This video should really help.
  • Make sure that if something sounds like it should be on a downbeat then it actually is on the downbeat and adjust the time signatures according. For example, bar 13 should be 2/4 so that the D is on beat 1.

17 hours ago, punintentional said:

Just a few observations.

• You could do with varying the rhythm more. The vast majority of the piece is either a run of crotchets or a run of semiquavers.
  • By bar 10 I really wanted to hear something other than crotchets. Perhaps dotted crotchet, quaver, crotchet instead.
• Consider the contour of the melody. This resource should be useful.  
• bar 25: it suddenly feels like a completely different piece.
• bar 28: the minim very abruptly kills all the energy which was built up in the preceding few bars
• Watch out with time signatures.
  • bar 6 should be 3/4 then 2/4. This video should really help.
  • Make sure that if something sounds like it should be on a downbeat then it actually is on the downbeat and adjust the time signatures according. For example, bar 13 should be 2/4 so that the D is on beat 1.

 

 

Thanks punintentional for your review and your constructive suggestions. Thanks for the link to the video also, even though it was intended for orchestral scores. I had tried to minimize change of time signature. However, in response to your last point, I made the time signature changes that you suggested, keeping the first note on the downbeat. I uploaded a new score with the changes. However, since I could not detect any difference in the MP3 recording, I didn't change it.