August 10, 20187 yr It sounds very nice. On the other hand you stay all the time in the same motif (or two), basically there is a rhythmic ostinato. I think it vould be a good first section to go into something else which would be more melodic and with the use of counterpoint. I'm not an expert in strings but I think some parts in the cello and bass are, if not out of range, dangerously there. If the piece is in Em why didn't you put the key signature?
August 10, 20187 yr Author Thanks for your feedback! I'm working on using the counterpoint and finding nicer melodies as well as getting rid of the ostinato as you said. I moved the bass and cello an octave lower and merged the two violin and viola to form only two voices so I can insert a melody on the first violin. I also put the key signature. Also, instead of repeating theme A I'm trying to find a better and original ending that is not the same as the beginning of course.
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