I'll Be With You

Wow, it's been a while since I've been on here! So I'm close to finishing my second vocal piece, and I'm having a little bit of writer's block in the accompaniment line for the bridge. I've got chords in the bass clef, but I can't seem to figure out what to put in the treble clef. If anyone could help me get over this slump, I'd really appreciate it. And as always, general constructive criticism is welcome.

Update (December 10, 2019): I had a friend of mine help me out today, so at least there's actually some stuff in the accompaniment line for the bridge now. But it's far from complete, so I'm posting the updated version on here for critique.

Edited December 11, 20196 yr by serena221b

There's not a lot of... motion in this piece. Most everything is pretty static and it takes away from moments that might otherwise have more weight; an arpeggiated eighth note figure doesn't resolve this.
At bigger points like the place where you have marked forte (the blank measures), it seems like a very musical theater-type high point, and my advice there is to try to find some sort of way for the past vocal material to form the counterpoint against the voice. Even better if you can insert snippets of responsorial passages in between measures as retransitions.

On 12/9/2019 at 10:33 PM, Monarcheon said:

There's not a lot of... motion in this piece. Most everything is pretty static and it takes away from moments that might otherwise have more weight; an arpeggiated eighth note figure doesn't resolve this.
At bigger points like the place where you have marked forte (the blank measures), it seems like a very musical theater-type high point, and my advice there is to try to find some sort of way for the past vocal material to form the counterpoint against the voice. Even better if you can insert snippets of responsorial passages in between measures as retransitions.

 

^^^^^EVERYTHING here!