Music composition

Music composition by my Son Aditya. Any advice would be helpful.

@Aditya Hirey

Hey there, please upload a score for a more detailed review.

The second motive is exactly the same except for the base which becomes very repetitive around 1:33.

2:40 no... not these chords again. Look, there are some exceptional pieces that use those chords say... The Breaking of the Fellowship, 

But for me as a musician that's the definition of "overused".

Around 3:00 it's as if he returns to the motive after traveling around although he didn't really.

I think that sums it up basically, he keeps on coming back to the exact same place although we never really leave it. Too repetitive for me...

Now I do have a specific note you might want to consider.

Please don't take it as a racist note but judging by the name and look- this musical style is not your ethnic one by no means.

By that I mean that I believe your son should be more familiar with his musical roots, for Hindi music has so much to offer.

That's not to say that he should abandon completely what he's doing at the moment, but mix these two into one interesting flavor.

Here's an example of a wonderful western-hindi(i think) mixture I really enjoy listening to:

On 12/10/2020 at 6:25 AM, Rabbival507 said:

@Aditya Hirey

Hey there, please upload a score for a more detailed review.

The second motive is exactly the same except for the base which becomes very repetitive around 1:33.

2:40 no... not these chords again. Look, there are some exceptional pieces that use those chords say... The Breaking of the Fellowship, 

But for me as a musician that's the definition of "overused".

Around 3:00 it's as if he returns to the motive after traveling around although he didn't really.

I think that sums it up basically, he keeps on coming back to the exact same place although we never really leave it. Too repetitive for me...

Now I do have a specific note you might want to consider.

Please don't take it as a racist note but judging by the name and look- this musical style is not your ethnic one by no means.

By that I mean that I believe your son should be more familiar with his musical roots, for Hindi music has so much to offer.

That's not to say that he should abandon completely what he's doing at the moment, but mix these two into one interesting flavor.

Here's an example of a wonderful western-hindi(i think) mixture I really enjoy listening to:

 

 

 

 

Hi Rabbival,

Thanks for your analysis, my son writes his music in the music sheets once he gets idea for the melody and sometimes he writes half of it and plays the other half causing repetition, I have just installed one of the software for score writing and would record score music. I will pass on your comments and advise him on putting more time for any music he is creating currently he spends 2 or 3 hours for over a week or two to produce one. He recently started learning Indian classical music and would hope it gets reflected or influence in his future endeavours.