Plastic Birds

Hello everyone!

I'm inviting you to check my new piano piece "Plastic Birds"

Hope you will like it 💚🙏

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TwI6lnTsZ9o

thank you!

i don’t really know what to say, besides that it was really good

@YakoB

Look- really, I'm not sure what you tried to achieve with the piece.

To me it just screams "cliche!" which is... fine in some cases I guess.

I'd try to get farther away from basic left hand patterns, all those useless octaves etc.

Try to organize your melodic material better in a way that it doesn't sound like an improvisation (you know, the patterns etc.)

The fact you haven't mentioned anything about what exactly it is you tried to achieve doesn't make it easier to try and guess.

To me it sounds like what you'd get if you googled "emotional piano pieces" or "sad anime ost" which are... just so very common and basic.

I'd say... try to rise above that. Try to get influences from other sources, a piano can be so much more than that

(pls refer to modern jazz musicians such as Tigran Hamasyan or romantic/post romantic ones like Debbusy).

שמע, אני בשיא הכנות חושב שזה בסדר, תלוי מה ניסית להשיג פה, העניין הוא שזה לא מחדש שום דבר ואני מאמין שאתה יכול ליצור יותר מאשר יצירה קטנה וזניחה מהשורה

אני לא יכול להכריח אותך להעשיר את הידע שלך, אבל אני חושב שזה יוכל לעזור לך להשיג מצלול וליצור אטמוספרות שעד היום לא התעסקת איתם... ושיוכלו ממש להעשיר את העולם

😄המוזיקלי שיוצא לך מהראש

1 hour ago, jejrekmek said:

i don’t really know what to say, besides that it was really good

 

Thank you for listening I really appreciate it!

32 minutes ago, composerfeb said:

I liked it . It was really great. Loved the spirit of the water

 

Thank you so much I really appreciate it!