Melancholy for Piano

Love theme for piano with mild melancholy. Thanks for any feedback

https://youtu.be/4hyKoWo1wIo

Edited March 25, 20215 yr by ClasiCompose

I think that maybe it is too short. Did you perhaps fall to that affliction that sometimes grabs me and makes me want to finish off a piece so that I can at least be satisfied that I have brought a musical idea to a completion? I think the ideas in this work could be greatly extended and developed into something even more impressive than its current state. You could even put together a multi-movement piece if you felt so inclined, you seem to have the composing chops to do this. I encourage you and everyone to always try and extend yourself as much as possible. Of course maybe you do that all the time so I suppose what I am really saying here is that I would be interested to hear more from you. 

Nice piece.

I think it would be better using pedal, and making a change in the texture in some part (the whole piece relies on the arpeggio and three voices up above).

@Advanced Blowhard

thanks for listening. I agree with what you said and thanks for your nice suggestions. Like you said, I didn't want to continue
 

 @Luis Hernández
thanks Luis. You are right, thanks for the nice suggestions, some changes are needed
 
 @composerfeb
thanks for listening. your daughter is really talented, keep encouraging her

I'd agree this could be extended, but if your aim was for short and sweet then maybe a little variation in texture would work well. Perhaps a less is more type thing. Maybe some rests in the left hand, or have some parts in the right as just single notes. Or if you like the melody as is, how about changing the intervals in some spots?

Overall very enjoyable though, I'm hoping to hear more from you soon!

@Thatguy v2.0

Thank you for your listening and good suggestions. I'll scrape this piece and save your ideas for another piece

with pedal : 

Edited March 23, 20215 yr by ClasiCompose