Nocturne Miniature

Hello again 🙂 This is another piece I wrote for the piano, a nocturne. It has multiple sections and a repeating main theme. I would be happy to have your opinions of it if you have any, I may send it to someone and would like to know what you think. The part I'm most worried about is the transition at bars 23-24, I'm not so sure about it.

Unfortunately, the audio is software generated, I haven't had the time to play the piece with all the modifications I made.

Thanks : )
 

François

Edited June 27, 20223 yr by francoisfj

Charming and beautiful.

Perhaps the motive at M.23-24 is a bit confusing since you introduced it there and nowhere else before but as it is done twice it doesn't sound bad at all. Changing it is up to you entirely, but if I were you I wouldn't touch that unless I came with something better to my mind.

The piece begins calmly but it keeps building some momentum and oscillates between sections of calm and sections of passion, it is charming while not too ambitious, making it approachable even by non-skilled pianists in my opinion. The ending though feels kind of unsatisfying to me because of two reasons: the ritardando isn't played in the digital interpretation (and I believe the ritardando would sum 100 points to the ending section) and because a personal preference of mine which isn't actually relevant. But yeah, mostly the ritardando that isn't played.

The score is very detailed (dynamics, tempo markings and comments) and it is always a pleasure to read while listening to the interpretation even if it's digital. However, I noticed that you didn't write 4/4 at the beginning of it. Just a small typo I guess, hehe.

Thank you for sharing, I hope you keep composing and sharing your work in this forum. It has been a pleasure to take a brief look at it :).

Kind regards!

On 6/28/2022 at 4:24 AM, Omicronrg9 said:

Charming and beautiful.

Perhaps the motive at M.23-24 is a bit confusing since you introduced it there and nowhere else before but as it is done twice it doesn't sound bad at all. Changing it is up to you entirely, but if I were you I wouldn't touch that unless I came with something better to my mind.

The piece begins calmly but it keeps building some momentum and oscillates between sections of calm and sections of passion, it is charming while not too ambitious, making it approachable even by non-skilled pianists in my opinion. The ending though feels kind of unsatisfying to me because of two reasons: the ritardando isn't played in the digital interpretation (and I believe the ritardando would sum 100 points to the ending section) and because a personal preference of mine which isn't actually relevant. But yeah, mostly the ritardando that isn't played.

The score is very detailed (dynamics, tempo markings and comments) and it is always a pleasure to read while listening to the interpretation even if it's digital. However, I noticed that you didn't write 4/4 at the beginning of it. Just a small typo I guess, hehe.

Thank you for sharing, I hope you keep composing and sharing your work in this forum. It has been a pleasure to take a brief look at it :).

Kind regards!

 

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 🙂

I agree with you about the ending, the digital interpretation doesn't play the ritarndando like I intended. And thanks for pointing out the 4/4 at the beginning, I'll update it.

I feel like the part at measures 23-24 would work indeed, but somehow I'm not completely satisfied with it. On the other hand, I hadn't been able to come with something better for it, so I might just leave it. Thanks for your input!

François

The structure is strong. Perhaps, following the style, some kind of climas is missed. Otherwise, I find it good.

On 7/2/2022 at 1:48 PM, Luis Hernández said:

The structure is strong. Perhaps, following the style, some kind of climas is missed. Otherwise, I find it good.

 

Thanks for the feedback! The climax for this piece I think is supposed to be after measure 25, but maybe it isn't enough indeed. I'm glad you liked the structure, because I was worried it may be a little too segmented.