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waltz - on the surface of the unknown


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(The photo in the first page in pdf file has been modified from picture "Apollo 17 Moon Panorama" (wikimedia commons.) )

This is one small waltz i have made.

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Not sure what to make of the score. It clearly shows two staves for piano and one for "Klassinen kitara," which Google Translate tells me is Finnish for "classical guitar." However, the sounds I'm hearing are that of a flute, piano, and [barely audible] guitar. You might want to make your score clearer about what instruments it's actually intended for.

Your chord notations indicate a G chord to start off with, but it's clearly an E5 chord (or a G6 chord if we're being nice). The rest of the work takes off into a confusing array of 8th note runs which are repeated in all 3 voices. There's nothing wrong with that except for the fact that you don't establish any harmonic patterns. It seems random. Even the rhythms don't fall into any sort of pattern, calling into question whether this is really in 3/4 time or if no time signature would be more appropriate. In my opinion, this work would be greatly strengthened by use of cadences and phrasing, and especially if some sort of structure could be provided, both harmonically and rhythmically.

It's not a bad piece, not even close. I just think you could perhaps spend a bit more time considering how to better structure this work. Give it good rhythmic motion and establish some harmonic patterns. That would really help out, I think.

Best,
Jörfi

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