piano A short piano piece

Hello everyone! 

I know it has been a while since I have upload a piece of music. That's because I went to balance uploads with reviewing, and sometimes I might be busy with my own compositions.  

This piece I am sharing with you is a solo piece for piano. 

Here is my goals this piece: 

1. A short piece no more than 1-2 minutes. 

2.  I want to a write a piece a minor; however, you do not hear tonic. 

3.  It uses dissonance to establish dark, foreboding mood

4. You may think...Mussorgsky?  Maybe? 

5. Uses a short motive through out the piece to create variations. 

I can not think anything. 

Let me know what you think.  I used to Audacity to render the wav to a mp3.  

Hi @Kvothe!

On 12/12/2025 at 5:10 AM, Kvothe said:

3.  It uses dissonance to establish dark, foreboding mood

In normal pieces I will find those parallel fifths and octaves between the melody and the ground bass unsettling, but here it well fits the mood! I do think the mood is well portrayed! 

I like the thicker texture and motivic writing in section B. But beware of passages like b.32-34, as no piainist would be able to play a 11th interval on a piano, maybe only on a harpsichord.

Also more details can be for sure added like the dynamics.

On 12/12/2025 at 5:10 AM, Kvothe said:

2.  I want to a write a piece a minor; however, you do not hear tonic. 

I don't get what you mean; the piece is in F minor and the tonic is always heard!

Thx for sharing!

Henry

HI @Henry Ng Tsz Kiu

Thank so much for the review. 

1. Bach would be rolling in his grave. He avoided direct octaves. I could edit that and make it more playable. 

2. Great idea about adding dynamics.  That was something I was trying to sort out, but, alas...couldn't. 

3.  Although the key is F min, I want the tonal focus on the piece to be v (C). And I wanted to use chromaticism to push the piece further away from I. 

I am glad to share my works, 

Kvothe.

P.s.  My musical style and taste is endless.  🙂

12 minutes ago, Kvothe said:

Bach would be rolling in his grave. He avoided direct octaves.

Well, he avoided it to enrich the harmonic fullness of his counterpoint, but I don't think have to avoid it here given the style and mood.

14 minutes ago, Kvothe said:

Although the key is F min, I want the tonal focus on the piece to be v (C)

Maybe the opening left hand figure can end on C instead of note F, that would provide a morr ambiguous reading.

Dont have a chance to listen to it, but from reading the score

the drone like base creates this strong anxious atmosphere with the melodies on top. Reminds me of second mvmt of Sibelius 2nd symph

also, Mr big hands syndrome again… unlike you expect rolling all of those chords? (Which I think ruins it a bit

@PCC "Mr. big hands" 😄 I am not Sergi Rachmoninov. He has larger hands than me.   One of his preludes is challenge for me to play. *sigh*. But I understand the pain with those with small hands. 

@Henry Ng Tsz Kiu I have adjusted b32-34. I have shifted voice 1 down an octave.  mp I feel is correct dynamic for the piece. I want to quite.  Something is lurking in the shadows, you know. 

Version 2 is now attached.