A piece I've composed based on a given melody (first allegro mezzo forte part)

i have not taken any composition classes before

and also the title of the piece is just a placeholder, the reason why it's called Fiesta is that that it's the name of the song the melody originated from

(also if u cant tell, the audio is just extracted from musescore)

any feedback would be appreciated! thanks for checking it out!

advanced.pdf

Edited May 31May 31 by PikapikaHei

It’s an interesting piece. I think you make excellent use of the dynamics and the rhythmic foundation, creating an intriguing yet effective contrast with the slow section.

What I like most is that the piano really sounds like a piano; I mean, the writing is idiomatic for the instrument.

13 hours ago, Luis Hernández said:

It’s an interesting piece. I think you make excellent use of the dynamics and the rhythmic foundation, creating an intriguing yet effective contrast with the slow section.

What I like most is that the piano really sounds like a piano; I mean, the writing is idiomatic for the instrument.

thank you so much for your comment! may u tell me in what ways can i do better?

Hello @PikapikaHei !

Welcome to the forum!

To me actually the piano writing is idiomatic! The melodies are also good.

On 6/1/2026 at 7:42 PM, PikapikaHei said:

thank you so much for your comment! may u tell me in what ways can i do better?

For me it would be the structure of the piece. You are going for an ABABA structure which the A and B sections provide good contrast with each other with different mood, tempo and texture. I would suggest you adding more developments in each of the A and B sections after their initial presentation, rather than just changing keys. For example the recurring A sections you could have developed the melodies with variations rhythmically and texturally. Also, it would be great if there is an assimilation of the two sections at the end. However, this is a very good attempt especially from someone who has never attended a composition class, so props to it and keep writing!

Henry

9 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hello @PikapikaHei !

Welcome to the forum!

To me actually the piano writing is idiomatic! The melodies are also good.

For me it would be the structure of the piece. You are going for an ABABA structure which the A and B sections provide good contrast with each other with different mood, tempo and texture. I would suggest you adding more developments in each of the A and B sections after their initial presentation, rather than just changing keys. For example the recurring A sections you could have developed the melodies with variations rhythmically and texturally. Also, it would be great if there is an assimilation of the two sections at the end. However, this is a very good attempt especially from someone who has never attended a composition class, so props to it and keep writing!

Henry

thank you so much for your feedback! ill try to implement your suggestions in my next work

Good start, idiomatic and the part leading is correct.

11 hours ago, Churchcantor said:

Good start, idiomatic and the part leading is correct.

thank you so much for your comment!