A piece I've composed based on a given melody (first allegro mezzo forte part)

i have not taken any composition classes before

and also the title of the piece is just a placeholder, the reason why it's called Fiesta is that that it's the name of the song the melody originated from

(also if u cant tell, the audio is just extracted from musescore)

any feedback would be appreciated! thanks for checking it out!

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Edited May 31May 31 by PikapikaHei

It’s an interesting piece. I think you make excellent use of the dynamics and the rhythmic foundation, creating an intriguing yet effective contrast with the slow section.

What I like most is that the piano really sounds like a piano; I mean, the writing is idiomatic for the instrument.

13 hours ago, Luis Hernández said:

It’s an interesting piece. I think you make excellent use of the dynamics and the rhythmic foundation, creating an intriguing yet effective contrast with the slow section.

What I like most is that the piano really sounds like a piano; I mean, the writing is idiomatic for the instrument.

thank you so much for your comment! may u tell me in what ways can i do better?

Hello @PikapikaHei !

Welcome to the forum!

To me actually the piano writing is idiomatic! The melodies are also good.

On 6/1/2026 at 7:42 PM, PikapikaHei said:

thank you so much for your comment! may u tell me in what ways can i do better?

For me it would be the structure of the piece. You are going for an ABABA structure which the A and B sections provide good contrast with each other with different mood, tempo and texture. I would suggest you adding more developments in each of the A and B sections after their initial presentation, rather than just changing keys. For example the recurring A sections you could have developed the melodies with variations rhythmically and texturally. Also, it would be great if there is an assimilation of the two sections at the end. However, this is a very good attempt especially from someone who has never attended a composition class, so props to it and keep writing!

Henry

9 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hello @PikapikaHei !

Welcome to the forum!

To me actually the piano writing is idiomatic! The melodies are also good.

For me it would be the structure of the piece. You are going for an ABABA structure which the A and B sections provide good contrast with each other with different mood, tempo and texture. I would suggest you adding more developments in each of the A and B sections after their initial presentation, rather than just changing keys. For example the recurring A sections you could have developed the melodies with variations rhythmically and texturally. Also, it would be great if there is an assimilation of the two sections at the end. However, this is a very good attempt especially from someone who has never attended a composition class, so props to it and keep writing!

Henry

thank you so much for your feedback! ill try to implement your suggestions in my next work

Good start, idiomatic and the part leading is correct.

11 hours ago, Churchcantor said:

Good start, idiomatic and the part leading is correct.

thank you so much for your comment!

hey this is pretty great! I've never really had concrete composition classes, so I can't give any specific tips but I do play a bit of piano and enjoyed this quite a bit. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing your creativity!

I think you have a lot of natural talent and creativity. Attending a class for something is nice, and can be really helpful, but there's really no substitute for just doing something and seeing and hearing for yourself what works, and what doesn't. Listening to and analyzing what other composers have done is an incredible education in and of itself.

It's impressive that you wrote this in such a playable and natural way! I hope you hold on to this colorful whimsy, too.

Thanks for sharing! This was a lot of fun to listen to.

10 hours ago, Veya said:

hey this is pretty great! I've never really had concrete composition classes, so I can't give any specific tips but I do play a bit of piano and enjoyed this quite a bit. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing your creativity!

thank you for your comment! im glad you enjoyed it. i actually did play the piano before as well but stopped cuz i switched focus to the violin, lol!

6 hours ago, SergeOfArniVillage said:

I think you have a lot of natural talent and creativity. Attending a class for something is nice, and can be really helpful, but there's really no substitute for just doing something and seeing and hearing for yourself what works, and what doesn't. Listening to and analyzing what other composers have done is an incredible education in and of itself.

It's impressive that you wrote this in such a playable and natural way! I hope you hold on to this colorful whimsy, too.

Thanks for sharing! This was a lot of fun to listen to.

thank you for your comment! im glad u find it fun! may i ask how should i be analyzing other's work?

5 hours ago, PikapikaHei said:

thank you for your comment! im glad u find it fun! may i ask how should i be analyzing other's work?

There's many different ways to analyze pieces, so really, that's entirely up to you. For example, find a piece of music that you absolutely love. One of your favorites. Listen along with a score of the music. You could ask yourself any of the following questions: "What is it about this piece I love so much? Why did the composer/song writer choose this chord, or voice the chord this way? Why did the composer develop their material this way? The composer changed direction here -- why, and to what effect? What kind of thing(s) is the composer trying to express?"

My word here, "analyze," sounds like dissecting a frog in a lab to understand its biological function. And you can literally analyze a piece, and assign all the chords and progressions, "this is the tonic, the dominant, subdominant, here's a lydian scale, etc." But simply mindful listening and meditating on what you're hearing, along with experimentation to see what works and what doesn't, goes a long way.

Read Beethoven piano sonatas on the toilet instead of People magazine, and that is part of it.