Lament of Time.

Hiya!

I have finished a new piece and am working with GPO Finale edition for the first time. The piece I have written is called the Lament of Time and it is very special to me. I wrote and performed it at my best friends funeral (both of whom are 14, my friend and I). It was a weird feeling to have him die so young, especially from drug overdose.

I can't really say anything about it. It is freeform and if it has a form it is not intentional. I almost didn't finish the piece. It is very sweet and I hope you enjoy its solemness. Oh, I almost forgot... the finale file is a GPO recording... so if you can't use GPO Finale just tell it noty to search for the patch. I am not posting a midi because the midi file doesn't capture the beauty of the piece.

Beautifulness or not, it would be the best if you post a MIDI. Not everyone has the beloved Finale.

Done. Check first post.

Hmm, pretty good.

The beginning sounded really dry and colorless. But that was Finale's fault; I played a little of it and with a little humanity it's possible to make the opening chords quite colorful. I'd like to hear your performance of it...

Your notation is a little weird. You wrote the third chord in your progression as an Am#5, which is just an F. But throughout the song you seem to have deliberately written it that way. I think that chord definitely plays the role of an F in your song. Do you have a reason for that notation?

Okay, on to the music. I think you did a good job developing your themes, but the themes themselves were lacking somewhat. For example, the arpeggios starting at measure nine seemed a little dry; there needs to be more contrast in that section. Also, I can't come up with a good musical reason, but I don't like the Ab in your main theme (in measure 6). I would have rather heard an F (I'm picturing a violin slurring up to the A in the next measure).

The kind of "modern" touch you put in from measures 16-18 felt out of place. It gave the song an awkward feel (a little unsettling would be powerful in a piece like this, but I think 16-18 was far too much), and takes away from the emotion of the song.

On the other hand, I really liked measures 51-53. That chord has a really bright sound... it's so bright that it's like a knife, actually. I think that's what makes it effective.

I think I would have liked to hear a tender, dreamy cadenza after measure 53, rather than jumping right back into the main progression (though I do like the take on the progression starting at measure 54).

Oh yeah, I really liked when you put the theme in the left hand in measures 32-39.

I liked this song, but I think the same idea could have been a lot more effective. I also have a hunch that if I heard a human playing it I would have enjoyed it significantly more.

Luke

The beginning sounded really dry and colorless. But that was Finale's fault; I played a little of it and with a little humanity it's possible to make the opening chords quite colorful. I'd like to hear your performance of it...

They really do live, one of these days i will record me playing it and I will post it. B ut, you know I haven't really heard it played, i just played it. But, from where I was it sounded cool.

Your notation is a little weird. You wrote the third chord in your progression as an Am#5, which is just an F. But throughout the song you seem to have deliberately written it that way. I think that chord definitely plays the role of an F in your song. Do you have a reason for that notation?

Yes, because sdince I am the only one who was playing it I wrote it to where I could read it best. I can read that easier for some reason...

Okay, on to the music. I think you did a good job developing your themes, but the themes themselves were lacking somewhat. For example, the arpeggios starting at measure nine seemed a little dry; there needs to be more contrast in that section. Also, I can't come up with a good musical reason, but I don't like the Ab in your main theme (in measure 6). I would have rather heard an F (I'm picturing a violin slurring up to the A in the next measure).

Ahh, I can't either. I guess I just didn't think about it. But, I still feel the note fits. I will try it the two different ways and make changes appropriately.

The kind of "modern" touch you put in from measures 16-18 felt out of place. It gave the song an awkward feel (a little unsettling would be powerful in a piece like this, but I think 16-18 was far too much), and takes away from the emotion of the song.

The modern part of the song is suppossed to make you uneasy. It is a weird part because it is symbolic of letting go and freely flowing with your heart's desire. And, it has the properties of grieving.

On the other hand, I really liked measures 51-53. That chord has a really bright sound... it's so bright that it's like a knife, actually. I think that's what makes it effective.

Thank you.

I think I would have liked to hear a tender, dreamy cadenza after measure 53, rather than jumping right back into the main progression (though I do like the take on the progression starting at measure 54).

ooo, good idea!!! I never thought of that! I will definately add that!!

Oh yeah, I really liked when you put the theme in the left hand in measures 32-39.

I liked this song, but I think the same idea could have been a lot more effective. I also have a hunch that if I heard a human playing it I would have enjoyed it significantly more.

Thank you very much!!!

Bumping this up! I know I'm not supposed to... but I am still looking for comments as this is to be performed again.