March 26, 200719 yr Hello everyone! I'd like to show the community my new piece. Made for MMORPG game, producer wanted me to make quite battlish and sublime track. Peter Szwach - Title theme (.mp3, 320kbit, 2:34, 6mb) I wait for your suggestions.
March 26, 200719 yr Hey, Nice work here but your percussion needs some serious work. Especially near the beginning it sounds downright lame; it lacks style. The brass effects are nice and the use of vocals is especially pretty, but the overall mix is too long and seems to lack a strong enough theme. It works, but it doesn't do anything at all to exceed the standards of a fantasy theme. Good effort but now you can start improving it with some traces of individuality and some better percussion. Thanks for sharing! ;)
March 27, 200719 yr Pretty nice. Like Marius stated, it lacks a bit of theme; in a sense it just seems like one pattern over and over again. Perhaps the song could use a romantic middle section and return to the theme again. I also feel the ending could be stronger. Is this a finished product?
March 27, 200719 yr Author No, it isn't finished yet. Could you describe what is bad in the percussion I used? The rhytm, voice? I wait for your suggestions! Thank you!
March 27, 200719 yr Overly repetitive, I'd say. Just use a little more variation with the military-march snares.
March 27, 200719 yr My issues with the percussion began with those beginning hits which tastelessly followed the melodic line with their rhythm for a while. Then they vanished entirely - both sounded like rather inexpert use of percussion. The snares were alright, but I found that they didn't sit very well in the mix, so you might want to try fixing that. My biggest issue with percussion though wasn't so much with what you had, but with what you didn't. A piece like this begs for some more serious, powerful and noticeable percussion with a lot of instrumental variety and rhythmic complexity. It can be time-consuming to write, but the end result is always better. Keep working at it.
March 28, 200719 yr Author I changed the percussion and remastered some instruments now. The same adress, waiting for your opinions and suggestions.
March 28, 200719 yr Okay, Percussion is better, mixing is cleaner and it sounds better overall - I'm not sure whether you pumped up the volume of the vocals or it's just my imagination, but in any case it sounds better with them louder so if you didn't, you could consider upping their volume. Especially where they have "stabs" along with the orchestra ('m talking about the full chorus, not that lovely female solo). It strikes me that I recognize this theme and I finally know from where; it reminds me a lot of the theme for Gothic 3. An standard, but very well-executed soundtrack, worth a listen. Good work, the ending seems more final too.
March 29, 200719 yr Author Thank you Marius! As I said - I changed the percussion and mastered some voices. I also pumped up the volume for choirs to make better effect. It is possible that this piece may be similar to Kai Rosenkrantz's Gothic 3 OST because some weeks ago I listened to it,