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Haha thx Vince, you are right that the 16 year old Henry couldn't play this at all, nor could he finish the whole piece! I just feel somewhat bored while having no output for several months despite lots of input, so I chose this one to rework! Henry

Thank you Sam! I don't know why the 16 year old Henry decided to modulate to F major at that time but looks like it work! I do like the climactic section, it's the section I revise a bit since the 16 year old Henry only left drafts in it lol!! Henry

Found this in a SMW rom hack race level with the help of some kind YouTuber commenters! Beyond the Hill - Kirby Return to Dreamland:

Ah, hahaha! How could I have forgotten about the "Three Blind Mice" song? Yeah I can definitely hear the resemblance now. You didn't come across as too critical at all! I think we need more reviewers and string aficionados like you to be more active here giving the members some really great and much needed advice! Thanks for your input!

Ah, I meant the children's song, "Three Blind Mice." Surely you've heard it (attached)? Anyway, it was fun to come back and see what's up. I mean, that's totally fair; the arco would definitely give it a sharper bite. And nah, wouldn't be too quick; they player would keep the hand in the bow position while plucking it (though they may complain about it). Obviously, up to you. I realize I may have come across as too negative with all the criticism—I think this piece is super cool and I'd love to hear the version with the expanded middle section if you ever get to it.

Thanks! It's been a hot minute since you've been here! Glad to see you reviewing again! As mentioned in the description - the piece is inspired by the show "Wednesday" as in Wednesday Addams from the Addams Family. I haven't seen Three Blind Mice either. Ah, yes. I haven't thought about how the roll suddenly includes more notes and in that regard, contradicts the decrescendo. Perhaps in a performance the number of notes in the stop could be reduced, maybe all the way down to only two notes as you suggested. I kind of like them arco. Besides, wouldn't it be too much switching between arco and pizzicato too quickly? Perhaps you're right there. I had planned for the middle contrasting section to be longer giving the key change more utility/necessity. Your nit-picks are also duly noted. Thanks again for your detailed review!

Cool stuff. I'm gonna guess you were quoting Three Blind Mice; I haven't seen the show. If not—well, you might have reinvented the wheel. A couple things: 1. I'm not sure how I like the quiet rolls at the ends of phrases. I know they're possible, but they're gonna be a little awkward and take time, delaying the nice quiet resolution. If I were to suggest a change, I'd maybe consider doing a two note thing (like a grace note + final note kinda thing), with some rolled figure in the keyboard to supplement the effect. 2. I'm guessing you want your many grace notes to connect to the triplet figure that come after them? I'd suggest being really explicit about that if so; string players are literal (e.g., don't bother giving string players phrasing slurs). 3. mm. 23–24 and 72–73: My brain kind of wants to hear some of these plucked for some timbral variety, especially since the keyboard takes over there. Something like the first note is arco, the others are plucked, until the anacrusis to the next bar. 4. I don't think your slow section needs a key signature change, personally, especially because I don't hear your key centers as the implied I–bVI–IV of A-flat major. Think of it like musical theater: you change keys so goddamn much that sometimes it ain't worth it. (Also F-flat major is kinda obnoxious to read). Nitpicks: a. Could use some more courtesy accidentals, when used in succession. For instance, throw a courtesy in m. 41 just for funsies. b. D/C double stop is kinda annoying, and very sad that it moves to Eb/A, which can't use the open A. I see the voice leading, it could maybe be a little more practical, though. c. Make sure dynamics are on the notes played. I think we really only put dynamics if it's "n" at the end of the note's duration. Maybe it's for the playback. d. Last measure: take out the rests in the right hand, since it's written like the right hand is doing a register transfer to a lower octave. Really fun stuff. Congrats.

For your interested ..... improved harmony, better support for the singers, removed parallel motion, some tweaks in the piano score. Here's the finished version .... Sing It Loud 9-25-25.mp3

Uton mid blisse dancian! Lovely work ... Mark

In measure 4, over the Bb chord you have parallel 5ths between Horn (concert G and Ab) and Bassoon (C and Db). Also in measure 6, beat 3 you have the Horn on concert C while the Bassoon plays Bb - is that intentional? Looks great so far!

Awesome Henry! I bet 16 year old Henry couldn't play like this recording 😄 Well done, it's good to hear music from you again!

Wow! The piece unfolds and reaches climax quite effectively. I can totally see how the music itself demanded a modulation to F major there lol—and it works great! The fugato section was a nice touch with theme A as the episode and theme B as the subject. I like how the climactic section cools down with plagal harmonies iv—I, gives a bittersweet aftertaste to all the previous agitation. That’s why the decision to end it on the major version of the tonic was a good choice. Such a competent and fluent work!

Oh my, that's definitely it. 😮 Wrote this melody for the French horn to play as a prelude-esque intro. I tried to give nods to the main melody,but I also don't want to make it too redundant. Any feedback there? I struggle a bit with melody writing, especially when I've already written some material that I just love lol.

Thx Vasilis! Henry

This is incredible. So inspired and perfect structured. Well done my dear Henry. 👏

I'll quote for you another passage from Chapter 32 of Gabor Mate's "In the Realm of Hungry Ghosts" - a book about addictions. The author talks about his addiction to buying CDs of orchestral and classical music:

Hi long time for no posting! I decided to post an old work of mine.This Nocturne in C-sharp minor is a juvenile work of me as a 16 year old. I didn't think much at the time of composing, but I did write in the style of Chopin Nocturne then. And then a sudden thought caused me to have a 1st try in fugue in 2:35! I revised the work recently to improve on some voice leadings and transitions except passages after the fugato, but retained as much the original intention as I can as a 16 year old then. The work, even though as immature as it is, does reflect some of my feelings then. Here is the Youtube video and the score of the piece: (Final Draft) Nocturne in C sharp minor.pdf This work can be regarded as in a rondo structure: 0:00 1st part(A), typical Chopin Nocturne texture. Don't know why I modulated the music to F major but the music did so himself... 0:58 2nd part(B) Main melody in F major, but with a new b motive in b.31-32 1:35 3rd part (A') The main melody in the original key can't wait to enter... Gets more agitated and cools down. 2:35 4th part (B'). A fugato using motive b as subject and main melody as episode, modulates once more to F major 3:57 Last part and coda (A''): The A section returns with some registeral change, then gets more agitated. 4:29 is the climax of the piece which is my favourite too, I like the agitation in it. 4:47 starts the coda and finally the mood cools down and ends in tonic major. I played the recording myself. I do make one major slip in 3:22 but the recording is otherwise good enough for me. Feel free to leave comment below! Henry

I find it hard to parse what you want the harmony to be in this measure. And there is a parallel 4th between Violin I and Contrabass across the measure line (C to Eb in Contrabass, F to Ab in Violin I). Maybe that might also be a source of your dissatisfaction?

@PeterthePapercomPoser thank you! I agree, I already look back at it and cringe a litle bit, though I like it quite a bit for a attempt. honestly I agree with you on when the piece should have finished, I just had this last phrase as an idea in my head for a while and I kind of wanted an exuse to use it

I listened to the opening movement, and loved it! It's sparse and haunting, then shifts halfway through to become mysterious and tense, like a Film Noir. Congrats on completing this major work. Will try to listen to the other movements when I have time.

Hello again @Krisp! I really love the lyrical melody of this one! And the constant unpredictable modulations and free tonality is really great and always keeping the listener on their toes! Thanks for sharing this thoroughly enjoyable song! P.S.: I also liked the very impressionistic introduction!

Hello @J. Lee Graham and welcome back to the forum! Wow! What a wonderfully accomplished work! I am glad that despite feeling "unworthy of the material" that you managed to finish it after more than 20 years!!! I also have had such an experience. I started my Variations on "Deck the Halls" for Piano and Orchestra back in the 2000's as well, over a decade before when I ended up finishing it. And it was only thanks to the fact that I learned to write music on paper that I managed to have the discipline to finish it. I totally understand the sentiment! It is hard to limit yourself when writing for period instruments when you know that superior versions of the instruments would in fact have capabilities that would very much facilitate the music in question for the composer. I think I would also leave the piece as-is knowing that there do in fact exist versions of the instruments with the capability to actually perform the piece live, which is ultimately all that I would care about. I have to say that my favorite movement is the Polonaise! What a delight to hear someone include this stately Polish dance in a concerto! I am Polish myself and have danced the Polonaise as a youth in a Polish Folk Dance Ensemble. The dance has all the pomp and nobility of the spirit of Poland! I think it was also you who remarked that your favorite National Anthem is the Mazurek Dabrowskiego in an old thread I read somewhere. I actually have always dreamed of creating a mash-up of the Mazurek with the American National Anthem to create a kind of "Polish-American Heritage Anthem". We'll see if that ever comes to fruition! Thanks for sharing this wonderfully bright piece! I thoroughly enjoyed it!

Hey @L.S Barros! Nice galliard! It does sound very dance-like and jovial! I have a few Baroque-style dances that I've written myself that are in more of a modern style (for string orchestra), but I've never written a galliard or pavane or any of those old Renaissance dances. But I'd really like to - I'm always fascinated by the idea that one could write a dance suite or longer orchestral work with all different kinds of dances from throughout the ages, as well as more modern dances like the tango or salsa. Thanks for sharing! I really like the addition of instruments half way through! And the instruments sound like legitimate early-music instruments! Great job!

Hey @Tunndy and welcome to the forum! I think that both the melody and harmony in this piece are quite unique and personal to you! The piece starts quite underwhelmingly and gives the listener time to get used to its unique melodic content and the waltz rhythm. Then it gets really pompous and dynamic! And despite it being undoubtedly a piece that you will consider a part of your juvenilia, it still shows great talent and musical sense. I think the only part that I find objectionable is that the piece sounds like it's ending for too long. To me the piece sounds like it could have ended at 1:30, but then it keeps going, repeating a phrase which to me seemed a little redundant. But that's just my 2¢. Thanks for sharing! P.S.: Please consider leaving a ❤️ or a 🏆 reaction for the people (including myself) who have gone through the trouble and donated their time to review your music. It really helps us feel appreciated and keeps the forum a healthy place for people to share! Thank you!