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A very pleasant sonata with clean lines. I’d classify it as early classical in style, perhaps with hints of musique galante. I think it would sound good on a harpsichord. But given that the piano has been chosen, I do think it’s advisable – as @MK_Piano rightly points out – to be thorough and precise with the articulations.

Hello, @jejrekmek! It seems no one has commented yet, I wonder why. I find this track really interesting; the unique atmosphere is fantastic. Your exploration of rhythm is excellent, and I love the chaotic vibe, reminiscent of Igorrr, as well as your sense for harmony (I noticed you used some intriguing chords in your other piano pieces, too). The way the song unfolds is unpredictable as well. I see from your profile that you're around 18 years old? It’s really amazing that you’re creating such an original atmosphere at that age. Age might not matter. However, there is one point that stood out to me: the mix feels a bit rough around the edges. I’m not exactly good at mixing myself, but let me share my impressions as a listener. Upon first listen, the volume felt too high, and the vocals were getting buried by the instruments, making it difficult to clearly hear the melody and individual instrumental parts. Personally, I think adding a bit more reverb to the vocals or positioning them more three-dimensionally within the mix would help. You might already be aware of this, but how about using plugins like "DearVR pro2" to position the sound more precisely? Instead of relying on extreme panning (left/right placement), using such tools to position instruments spatially would likely improve sound clarity and the overall mix. You might also want to lower the master volume slightly. I think your work is really original!

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Hello MK_Piano, Thank you for your response. I agree that there are a lot of musical ideas throughout the movement. The introduction, for example, is a continuous flow of ideas that eventually leads to the slow march-like melody. I believe the A theme returns effectively in the recapitulation. As for the B theme, I reused some motives from its first appearance, so it is perhaps less obvious that the fast E-major section represents the B theme. I must apologize for the improper use of the tempo markings in the score. Those were mainly intended to improve the MIDI playback and would certainly be revised before a live performance. I really appreciate your feedback, and I will definitely work on these points. Thank you!

Wow! What a cute piece of music to have listened to. Very reminiscent of classical style and a treat to come across. This said, I do have some comments regarding the work; partially with engraving and partially with the music/form. Engraving: From what I can see, everything is playable for a pianist, and with this style, or earlier, I would put more articulation marks like slurs or staccatos. It will help us understand the dance-styles better throughout the work/ see the phrase ideas more clearly. If I were to go and play this at my piano, I would approach it as a Mozart keyboard work and focus a lot on phrasing and articulation. For my preference, since this emulating classical style, I would also use classical dynamics (p, mf, f and ff) versus mezzo piano. Form: The thing that stuck out the most was not the musical content or the form per se, but how you notated each B-section in the first two movements. While Mozart did add key signatures for some developments within his sonatas, I do not think it is necessary to change the key signatures in each movement as they are so short. (Of course, change the key sig on each movement however) This is not a challenging piece in the catalogue of piano repertoire and if I were to give my students this to sight-read, even they could get thrown off by the signature change. I think it would be better to remove the G-major signature in mvt. 1 and keep the sharps explicit. Same in mvt. 2 with the C-major section. Lastly, I do think in terms of musical content, you can mess with a more active recap (or final A in the rondo form) in each movement. Simply hearing the themes again without a change in the harmonic scheme or texture in a big way leaves each movement as a little lackluster; at least in the way they end. Here is some food for thought and I’d be curious to see what you can come up with in the future. Good Job!

Thanks! I want to be able to give feedback like you one day!