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skip to 3:30 if you get bored of the vibraphone intro lol

Hi again, @jejrekmek! This is a truly wonderful piece; I find myself wondering how you manage to create something so original. Your compositional ability feels less like the result of mere practice and more like an Individual ability. I really enjoyed this track, and the melody stayed with me long after it finished. The melody is catchy, yet the composition itself is musically fascinating. I take my hat off to you. Like @Henry Ng Tsz Kiu, my personal favorite part is the section starting at 5:30. The whole song is lovely, but that part really draws me in. The following comments aren't about the composition or the ideas themselves, but simply about the mixing (though I’m not particularly skilled at mixing myself, I’m sharing this from that perspective). I think the composition and sound choices are excellent. Again, this is about the mix. I have no intention of imposing my views, and the final decision is yours as the composer. There is no objective "right" or "wrong" here, it’s a matter of personal taste. I hope you’ll take this merely as a small, tiny suggestion. To make things clearer, I’ve roughly divided the song into five sections. Section 1 (0:00–3:35) I think the key to this section is "spatial breadth." You might want to try widening the sound of the vibraphone a bit using spatial plugins. The occasional noises (or synth-like sounds) might make a stronger impression if you increased their volume and panned them to move across the stereo field. However, the current state—where the sounds are almost audible but just out of reach—actually adds an interesting element that contributes to the section's mysterious atmosphere. So, leaving it as is might be fine, too. Additionally, adding a touch of reverb to those sounds and the vocals would likely enhance that sense of spatial openness. There is noticeable audio distortion (clipping) at various points throughout this section. While I am unsure if this was intentional, given the section's sense of transparency and its dreamy, mystical atmosphere, I feel the track would be more effective without the distortion. I felt that plugins such as OrilRiver, Giant Verb, DearVR Pro2, and Exoverb would suit this track well (all of which are completely free). I think the vocals would benefit from a bit more reverb and increased volume. For reference, I have attached images illustrating the spatial positioning. Section 2 (3:36–5:45) In this section, I felt the volume balance between the guitar and vocals was off. Instead of panning the guitar hard left, it might be better to position it "diagonally forward-left" relative to the center. There is a lot packed into the mix, so I cannot list every detail, but the rock guitar panned to the right could perhaps be made clearer. The right side feels a bit cluttered, which seems to diminish the impact of other sounds. Also, the kick drum sounds a bit detached (too isolated); it feels like it is playing on its own rather than as part of a cohesive drum kit. Section 3 (5:46–6:37) Personally, I like the placement of the ethnic drums. However, the sounds on the right seem panned too far outward. Perhaps you could try adjusting the angle to point them a bit more toward the "nose" (the center) relative to the listener's position? The same applies to the guitar. Section 4 (6:38–7:53) The main issue here is the vocal volume. Or rather, the entire song. Simply adjusting the vocal level should dramatically improve the overall quality of the track. Also, you might want to fix the clipping (audio distortion) occurring right at the very end, around the 7:50 mark. Section 5 (7:54–9:29) This part is good. You could perhaps raise the piano volume slightly? But as it stands, the mix doesn't cause listener fatigue. This section also demonstrates that there are no particular issues in the instrumental passages. The piece is truly wonderful, and I really enjoyed it. Finally Do you have a YouTube channel? If you can develop it successfully, I think some people would be captivated by your music. It would be great if you could establish a unique video style, much like Louis Cole or Jacob Collier. Of course, the music industry is incredibly tough, so I can't guarantee you'll become a superstar like them. That said, had I discovered you on YouTube, I would probably love your music. This is an important point, too: I’m not just irresponsibly saying, "You're guaranteed to succeed!" Luck plays a role, and please don't neglect what you need to focus on right now; keep attending to those priorities while also working hard on your music production. If there’s anything else you’d like to ask, feel free to send me a DM anytime. I look forward to your future work! P.S. I hope I didn't come across as sounding condescending. If so, I apologize. I actually appreciate your sound immensely, if anything, I might be the one who should be learning from you. Kind regards, Nd 6829.

Hi @jejrekmek! I don't find the intro boring at all; on the other hand I find it very religious which reminds me of Buddhist or Hindu music. Your singing is like chanting which is religious as well, and the chords, like Peter said is other-worldly. After it it's more in the world but the accompaniment reminds me of Gamelan music in the interlocking repetitive structure. Nice use of some microtones as well. The section after 5:30 is so interesting to listen to, it's almost like a musical example in a World music class with those drums and percussions! The rhythm throughout the piece is fascinating, again reminds me of world music! The ending is really calm to listen to like many of the pop Japanese music! I really enjoy this one, thx for sharing! Henry

okay, for some context, i had to dig up an old friend's old discord dms to find these. also, i dunno your expectations on these but i hope they're good enough? they are very old so my writing skills were...meh i guess i dunno. you can pick/use/choose any of 'em. #1, this is from october 2018. i think this is about the time that i was discovering my feelings for somebody for the first time ever. i was clueless lmao Question. Once upon a time In a day with lots of rhyme In a school with students learning In a break with never ending I saw a lady Who walks silently Towards the cafeteria With none other than her friends I cant believe what i just witness As i stopped walking because her sweetness As the lady smiling beautifully But, I don't know what to expect A year passed My feelings lasts But there is a question That needs an attention "How do i get to her?" I asked "When is the time?" I shrieked "Where is the place? " I reflected But I'm afraid, I'll be rejected I saw the lady everyday Finally i knew her name With the feelings of lame But, when do i get her? The same question popped up As the curiosity blows up But when do i get the answer When she doesn't even give me a letter? I tried to give the lady a letter With thought that i will get to her But the reality have really shown me That the lady did not even read the letter The same question popped up As the curiosity blows up But when do i get the answer When the lady didn't even read the letter? #2, this is from november 2018 Time's One time, i look at the window With the sadness being so low I enjoyed the beautiful noon And i wished it won't be gone so soon A month passed I saw a tower being constructed I like that tower So my happiness still in me later 2 months passed There's no birds around I felt kinda sad But there's no sign of anything bad. 4 months really passed away The scenery changes really quickly As my word become more badly I felt like the old times are really done I felt like the happiness are really gone Usually i like new good things But this time, it really stinks It stinks like an old socks That are left in the ship's docks Why...does...that...happen....?

or something like that Fade out because I don’t know how to end the piece. It feels like it could just loop forever