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This piece confuses me... Why are there 3 violin parts and not just 2? 2 violin sections, 1 viola section, 1 cello section, and 1 bass section is the norm. Writing for nonstandard ensembles is fine, but using a standard ensemble, in this case string orchestra, but with minor ordering differences just 1. makes it look like you don't know what you're doing (and you demonstrably don't) and 2. makes it significantly harder to have your piece performed. Who's going to have a string orchestra with 3 violin sections? No one. Why are there numbers all over the page? Roman numeral analysis is for... well, analysis. You don't include it in a score, and the other numbers I guess might be for figured bass, but that's not how you do that? Learn how to do something before doing it is generally a good rule of thumb. The instruments are not written for idiomatically. Those leaps in the violin in the middle of the piece are way too big. The soprano part is also WAY too hard, even for a professional soloist. It has super technical and absurdly fast extended passages in the very high range. If you gave this to a soprano, she'd would absolutely refuse to do it. Some of the harmonic choices are also odd. You seem to be wanting to do an imitation of a renaissance style, but it's just not achieved very well. It lacks the right harmonic language. I'd expect more raised leading tones, piccardy 3rds, etc etc. There are people on here that are much more familiar with this style that may be able to provide more specific feedback, but it sounds very messy to me, not elegant like the music of the time. Finally, the music doesn't match the text at all. The text is beautiful, solemn, contemplative, and the music just isn't. Why? I sing gregorian chant for a TLM parish, I'm very familiar with motets and liturgucal/sacred music, and this just isn't something I would choose to include at mass. I wouldn't even include it in a secular program. It's just not that well put together or though out. I would take more time to study the ensembles and instruments you write for, including vocal ranges. Also look into studying counterpoint, doing species counterpoint exercises, and harmony of the period. Studying galant schemas might also be beneficial for you. And most importantly, study scores! If you don't know how to notate something, reference a (modern print) score. Clearly you are amateur and young (young composers, haha) so don't worry. You will improve, probably quickly, but you need to spend more time studying theory and practicing with study pieces and exercises.

I present to you my next cantata - "Laudate, pueri" (Ps 112) for tenor, flute and basso continuo consisting of 6 parts. It's rather short and for small ensemble, but it has a chance to be played in real life - until then computer playback will be added. It's meant to lighter than my previous cantata, with more concertante technique used... The first part is a dialog between two soloist, the second (and fifth) is tarantella-like with basso ostinato. Third and fourth i wrote what I had on my mind XD. Fifth is fugue (or fugato to be exact i think) with soloist doubling the theme entries. Any tips and feedback welcomed! Laudate, pueri.pdfLaudate, pueri.mp3

If you can appreciate atonal music, you might want to try listening to my professor's music. He is Serei Zsolt and he has YouTube recordings of his music. It might seem boring at first but trust me if you can feel it you will.

Hello. This is my first post here, presenting hopefully the first of many sacred solo motets and religious pieceso vos omnes sheets.pdf. I am very inspired by the italian masters Antonio VIvaldi and Federico Maria Sardelli. This is a sacred solo motet for soprano, strings, and continuo based on the Latin Vulgate translation of Lamentations 1:12. I really wanted to capture the raw and shocking horror of the suffering and death of Christ, the Son of God for the sins of men. The same shock that Dell'Arca captured so masterfully in his statues of the Lamentation for the death of Christ. Hopefully my work has served that well too. O vos ómnes qui transítis per víam, atténdite et vidéte: Si est dólor símilis sícut dólor méus. Atténdite, univérsi pópuli, et vidéte dolórem méum. Si est dólor símilis sícut dólor méus. English Translation: O all you who walk by on the road, pay attention and see: if there be any sorrow like my sorrow. Pay attention, all people, and look at my sorrow: if there be any sorrow like my sorrow. O vos omnes- M.M..mp3

Maybe tomorrow (it’s 2 AM where I live) or maybe I won’t. A more in depth harmonic/voiceleading analysis is quite an involved and time consuming process, and I am very busy as it is. I will try to find the time though.

If you could graciously with your time outline any areas in particular where you feel the harmony is incorrect or not servicing the piece or elements that could be reduced I would greatly appreciate it. I am a young composer still learning.

Firstly I appreciate greatly the feedback given. It was not intended for there to be 3 violin sections but rather 2, with Violin 1 being a soloist which is evidenced I believe with the middle section where it is labeled solo. Perhaps I should have written Violino Principale for greater clarity. You correct on the roman numeral usage which I had to track where I was harmonically. I am aware that isn't included in a final score. I realize my compositions with vsts and seeing that I had not yet included a keyboard accompaniment I decided on "cleaning it up". I also thought it would better help with any feedback or critiques to show more openly my thought process. The other numbers are not figured bass. They are merely scale degrees which like the roman numerals helped me track my harmony/motifs. As for the rest you may be very well correct. I did hope the bass line at least is written idomantically or certain antiphonal elements in the violins. I will agree that my violins may have reached too high in some areas. And for the vocals I may have leaned to heavily into a violinistic approach. The harmonic langauge was not an attempt to imitate the renaissance style. Simply what I have observed from Vivaldi's and Sardelli's violin concertos and vocal works. As for the text I explained my intentions/desired effect in the description of the post. I understand the main presentation for this text and would agree my approach would likely not fill well in a mass setting. Perhaps it is far too extreme but I did wish to lean into a more operatic approach and my background is mainly with vocal synths(Vocaloid, Synth V) so my ear may be too accustomed to harsher music.

Hey Tunndy, Some feedback: I like the beginning: the rhythm, the darkness, really cool! Bars [7-10], really not my favourite section. I like the change of tone bar 28. I agree with Tristan that having forte everywhere would deserve a bit of nuance... In general, in enjoyed it, thanks for sharing! Julien

Greetings! This is the recorder consort version of the before mentioned madrigal, the reason why i instead am posting the recorder version and not the vocal version is because i have to use an AI to render my madrigals and vocal pieces, and sometimes it doesn't sound good, so that's why i choose to post the recorder consort version, enjoy!.LOB 133 O cruel fate!.mp3

Hi, welcome to the Forum! Not only as a composer, but as a harpsichordist, I find that there is too much of the same for too long. Essentially, a lot of repetition and not enough imitation/ independence. However, before I go on to elaborate, was it your intention to imitate baroque style?

Hiiiii Firstly, this is not 'cute' lol. I realized you definitely thought of the Rachmaninoff Moments-Musicaux for the start, that famous one Lugansky is famous for playing. (E minor one). You also used the polonaise rhythm. Nice. Next, this piece is overly forte-based, there is not enough quiet. Also, bar 39 is very good. I love that progression, but liszt would do something like Sfz there, and then the run down it starts slow but then speeds up all the way to A Tempo. Additionally, your themes and ideas are very restricted, if that's the right word, by the lack of interesting dynamics. Moreover, as someone with perfect pitch, you can really change the ending key signature as you are in 3 sharps while i heard Bb Minor (5 flats) and G minor (2 flats) I would say this has some potential, if you extended it and vary ideas, but for now, it is not performable, and even if it is playable and some distinction, it wouldn't be the best pianist experience. Good luck! -TristanTheTristan