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and indeed, old member. @ferrum.wav you should check out @SergeOfArniVillage works!

I'm just a random passerby, but I just wanted to say I thoroughly enjoyed listening to this! It's refreshing to hear a work that looks so complicated on paper, sound so simple and easily understood. And to be clear, that's a sign of masterful compositional skills. Honestly, inspiring, and this gives me a lot to think about. Thank you for sharing!

Hello @Josephine_Maccrimmon ! Welcome to the forum! Sorry for a late reply. I think the beginning of this sketch set up the mood well. You have many things you can do to move the composition forward. First is harmony. You are just staying in tonic D flat major in the passages presented. How about a half cadence and then modulates to a different key? Like, you can have a phrase ends on Ab major which is the dominant chord, and then start in a close key and then gets back to tonic Db major. You will already get some progress with this formula. Next is the instrumentation. You are using the flute as the melody carrier. What about the other instruments? You could easily switch roles with each of those instruments, for example having piano/oboe/quena playing the melody. Another thing is texture. What about changing the texture to a more polyphonic setting and invites more counterpoint? Also what about a contrasting section with different mood, tempo and key? These are all what you can consider for developing a piece! Henry