Romantic piano composition.

Hello everybody,

I worked with an old composition of mine (http://www.youngcomposers.com/forum/piano-composition-beginner-16564.html) and ended with slightly different style. Please have a listen.

http://www.mariam.ae/composing/comp4a.mp3

It sounds very good and simple... almost familiar...

it seriously sounds like a specific thing i have heard, i dont remember what its called but im sure most people know it.

its very pretty. but repetitive. you are swinging between, like, four chords. Just telling you that there is a big world of chords out there.

the end isnt really a good cadence, unless you want it to be like that. III - i is NOT a good cadence. it sounds too sudden because you are in a major key and you sudden throw in the tonic chord of its relative minor key and end there.

another suggestion about the performance of the piece. when you lift your foot up between bars, it sounds like your music is stammering as (inhale) if (inhale) you (inhale) are (inhale) talking (inhale) like (inhale) this. i think its better if you lift your your foot up more briefly at the BEGINNNIG OF THE SECOND CHORD, instead of in between two chords.

i hope i help.

Hello,

As previously said it does sound very familiar! But it's very pretty. My main suggestion would be to expand it more, contrasting section and such or just some new ideas or treatment of what you already have.

I think that ending works fine and the only reason it sounds sudden is that the piece is so short and hasn't really developed enough before it finishes.

Best wishes,

Camilla

Thanks everybody for the comments and the advices! Another comments?

I like it, but as soon I think you start going some where with the music you end all of the sudden. Keep working on it.

this is a very nice sounding piece, but I agree with the other posters that it should be expanded. maybe a key change at the end with the same theme played stronger would be nice.

keep up the good work!

Thanks very much. I will do my best.

I think I know why it sounds familiar, whatever, the starting theme is from Richard Clayderman's Marriage d'amore's second theme.

As I said reduction. yeah. The style of acompaniment is "153" (a tenth with a fifth in it), and it sounds super like his style, if you get me.

as for my views, I suggest you write less in the "153" accompaniment. Use it only for a short time. repetitive use imo, doesnt wear well in individuality. You might want to also introduce a drastic second theme to counter the first one, to lengthen the piece and well.. make it your own!

just my two cents. ;)

Marriage D'amour!! thats what it is!!!

Hello David,

I appreciate your post very much.

the starting theme is from Richard Clayderman's Marriage d'amore's second theme.

Is it? Can you please provide a link for the melody so that I could hear it?

And what about the ending and middle parts? Does they remind you with something else?

I composed this variation-melody based on my previous composition ( If you heard it (and I think you did) you will notice that they both have the same chord progression except that the first one is a little bit popish. What about the first variation, does it remind you with something else, btw?

I remember that I composed my first composition in front of my keyboard and worked on it about one year (not continuous working of course :) ), and ended up with a modest melody of about 3:00 min. The motivation of my first composition was a special event in my life (nothing else). However, when I posted it in music-composition forums, most of the reviews said that it reminds them with a melody or advertisement music but they don't what it is exactly! I think this is my destiny!

By re-reading the posts again: Could you please explain what do you mean by:

The style of acompaniment is "153" (a tenth with a fifth in it),

Thanks,

By re-reading the posts again: Could you please explain what do you mean by:

Thanks,

probably like:

C, the E an octave above it, and then the G a fifth above the first C.

so if i write it out with numbers, it would be 1 10 5.

I am not sure if I understood you correctly, but thanks alot.

Dude the I-IV-V-III chord progression is so cliche and old.

you mean i - iv - V/III - III - iv - V ---- i ?

ya, a little plain.

but still nice.

Well, your not pushing any bounderies of music with this one for sure, but it's a nice little peice of music. It could easily be three times as long, if you develop the song and then recapitulate this first section again.

Keep up the good work, just, um, try working on the originality of your music.

you desperately need a developement, and climax.

this doesnt have a form........

i suggest ABA to start with. :)