Piece for Oboe, Flute and Cello in A major

Just wanted to see what everyone thinks of my latest composition.

It's written for Flute, Oboe and Cello, and it's pretty brief.

I intend to write 2 other movements, this one will probably be the middle movement.

My inspiration was the first part of Two Moons of Evening, a poem by Frederico Garcia Lorca, which can be found here

At this stage the only notation program I have is Finale Notepad which I don't think can export PDF's.

So for now all i can upload is a MIDI file and a Finale Notepad file.

Please give feedback, feel free to rip it to shreds :thumbsup:

Also, because I am very much an ametuer I have no idea what this kind of piece is called.

If anyone could help me with that it would be greatly appreciated.

Suggestions for a name for the piece are also welcome.

moon1(2).MUS

Finale NotePad 2008 - [moon1(2) revised].pdf

moon1(2) revised.MID

Were is it?

Just a note for exporting PDFs, try Googling CutePDF. When you install that, you click "Print" and select CutePDF as your printer to export what you're working on to a PDF file.

I liked your piece, thoughI don't have much to say about it. There are some places that are really empty-sounding, such as m.19, where I think the oboe could come in sooner, and m.21, where it feels like the oboe dropped out sort of abruptly. Also, are you intending to have more than one player on each part? If not, I would delete the C-sharp in the flute part in the last measure.

Also, regarding the first measure and m.11, you could write the flute part with a dotted half note with a mordent instead of the way you have it written now. This looks cleaner, and it produces the same effect you were trying to get.

I wouldn't mind seeing a score.

This piece is an odd instrumentation, but odd is not necessarily bad at all. Guessing by the MIDI sounds, you probably haven't used a lot of articulations? I would advise checking out articulations, especially for the winds.

This piece feels a little.....stale....in the sense that I'm not sure where we are at, or where we are going, and that even if I did, I'm not sure if would matter. That wasn't a diss, it just seems like the beginning and the end are so very similar. Again though, that doesn't mean it's bad.

As for naming it, think about what it makes you think of, and then try to make that as un-cheesy as possible. :D

Good luck!

PM me when you post a score, I'll save my comment for it.

I don't know how the moon could be dying if the piece is so happy. :unsure:

I don't know how the moon could be dying if the piece is so happy. :unsure:

There's a link in the original thread to a page with the poem, but I'll post it here so I can show you

So it's not all that sad.

This piece is an odd instrumentation, but odd is not necessarily bad at all. Guessing by the MIDI sounds, you probably haven't used a lot of articulations? I would advise checking out articulations, especially for the winds.

This piece feels a little.....stale....in the sense that I'm not sure where we are at, or where we are going, and that even if I did, I'm not sure if would matter. That wasn't a diss, it just seems like the beginning and the end are so very similar. Again though, that doesn't mean it's bad.

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Yeah, the articulations are pretty sparse, especially towards the end, but looking at it now I can't really think of any obvious place where I should put them. Although that's probably because I wrote it so I'll try that pdf suggestion from pedalpoint and hopefully upload a pdf shortly so I can get suggestions from you and others :thumbsup:

The thing about the beginning and end being similar is probably a result of me using the poem as the inspiration. I kind of got an overall mental image and based it on that, rather than different bits being based on different sections of the poem (which I tried at first but it didn't work). So my image was the same throughout, and as a result the music was fairly similar.

I'm curious, what did you mean by "and that even if I did, I'm not sure if would matter"?

Thanks for the feedback :) I have to go but I'll try and have a pdf ready to post tomorrow

Here is the score, with a couple of minor changes, and a new midi. I'll also attach them to the thread starter.

Finale NotePad 2008 - [moon1(2) revised].pdf

moon1(2) revised.MID