No name, no form

I don't know what to make of this piece so I'll just post it for you to hear it and let me know what you think.

Wow. likey likey. Sounds a bit like an impressionistic Rachmaninoff.

I think that is an interesting description indeed. I felt it had some form. I cannot imagine you think it has no form at all

I'd say abab. The passage starting at 55 looks like opening, although harmonically containing new material, and the eights seem a new idea as well. I love the contrast, and the floating melody, embellished with grace notes. Nice. I think there might be a tad too much places you just stopped and started over again. I works, but only when used not too much. I would glue some sections a bit more together. And I think the sixplets figure just provides you with the necessary texture for that.

I think that is an interesting description indeed. I felt it had some form. I cannot imagine you think it has no form at all <img src="http://network.youngcomposers.com/elgg/ipb/public/style_emoticons/default/wink.gif" alt=";)" />

I'd say abab. The passage starting at 55 looks like opening, although harmonically containing new material, and the eights seem a new idea as well. I love the contrast, and the floating melody, embellished with grace notes. Nice. I think there might be a tad too much places you just stopped and started over again. I works, but only when used not too much. I would glue some sections a bit more together. And I think the sixplets figure just provides you with the necessary texture for that.

My feelings exactly. There are too many stops for such a short piece and the sections are not very well connected, but I like the ideas and the thematic material... I'll see if I can improve it somehow. Thanks for your feedback!

I basically agree with those comments, however, I must say those chords are AMAZING! I mean, like, I wish I came up with those! Just really a really cool piece :D

It seems like it would be hard to play, but I'm not the worlds best pianist anyways, so that's that.

Thanks for posting this! I enjoyed it a lot :)

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I agree with Cramer that the piece has form, an ABAB, sort of -- the grand staves coupled with the leggiero arpeggio section. When you say it doesn't have form, do you simply mean that it's meant to be freeform? :hmmm:

I too believe the thematic material is interesting and strangely beautiful -- definitely a keeper. I enjoy the dissonance of the grandiose beginning, with the uneven meter and the soft flowing feeling of the B section. :)

In fact, to be absolutely honest, I don't really feel like there's anything wrong with the piece at all -- even transition issues. There doesn't seem to be anything a convincing and experienced performer couldn't make work.

However, I don't want to discourage you from trying to better yourself, of course, since that would defeat the entire point of me commenting. That's my opinion -- if you are not happy with your own piece, you must work until it is as you imagine it being :nod: Maybe you would like it better if you started subtly introducing some arpeggios as a second voice in pianissimo in measures 14-19? Just a thought.

Thanks for sharing, this piece was a real pleasure to listen to :phones:

I agree with Cramer that the piece has form, an ABAB, sort of -- the grand staves coupled with the leggiero arpeggio section. When you say it doesn't have form, do you simply mean that it's meant to be freeform? :hmmm:

I too believe the thematic material is interesting and strangely beautiful -- definitely a keeper. I enjoy the dissonance of the grandiose beginning, with the uneven meter and the soft flowing feeling of the B section. :)

In fact, to be absolutely honest, I don't really feel like there's anything wrong with the piece at all -- even transition issues. There doesn't seem to be anything a convincing and experienced performer couldn't make work.

However, I don't want to discourage you from trying to better yourself, of course, since that would defeat the entire point of me commenting. That's my opinion -- if you are not happy with your own piece, you must work until it is as you imagine it being :nod: Maybe you would like it better if you started subtly introducing some arpeggios as a second voice in pianissimo in measures 14-19? Just a thought.

Thanks for sharing, this piece was a real pleasure to listen to :phones:

Hello SergeofArniVillage,

Sorry for replying late. I don't really agree that its form is ABAB; more like A(Introduction)-B-A2-Coda.

I would have liked if I could somehow bring back the dissonance of the beginning, because right now the introduction sounds a bit disconnected the way the piece progresses. The A2 section has the same structure as A, but sounds more impressionistic and shares the mood of section B and therefore I find it difficult to bring back the intense and dissonant atmosphere of A.

Thanks for listening and for your comment. I am now working on another piece, but I will come back to it at some point in the future.