Love at War

Hello, after my introduce I think the best way to know You is to getting honest feedback and critic from You 

The piece is about lovers at battlefield. Their life are going to the end, and only hope is when one of them will sacrifice to help the second one.

Enjoy :) 

Soundcloud - Love at War

More starts to come up near 1:10, but the sense of melody and harmony is kind of lacking up to that point. I was also confused as to why you ended on the subdominant chord instead of resolving, especially given the source of inspiration.
The beginning may have had too much ebb and flow for my personal taste. That isn't so much a compositional issue as a sound design issue so not sure if you can fix that easily.
You're skilled enough at chordal inversions to a point where you could use a lot more chords to build upon that. B diminished was a nice addition, but for example, you don't really use major dominants.
It was quite pleasant! Keep it up.

Very useful feedback Monarcheon - I'm really grateful! Thank You.

I wont go that technical as Monarcheron.. I just casually listen to it... My feeling in the begining was that it was ok but I was expecting something to happen and not much were going on... The part around 1:20-1:30 was beautiful, like a climax... I would try to build it up a little more before ending... But overall I enjoyed the piece.

Well done :) 

I mostly agree with what Monarcheon and Dchris mentioned, but here's some thing no one else mentioned yet.

At 1:30, when finally after all the leading we get a big climactic explosion with exciting string etc. you really should keep that going a bit more before ending, it feels really incomplete and dissatisfying because you end it so early after a really long buildup. I also think you could thicken it with more instruments (horn would fit quite well there I think, or even just more variation in the strings), it felt pretty hollow.

Nice work.

So much thank You for all comment.

Dchrisanthako - I understand, will remember next time about it! :)

SebastianViola - Thank You, it's true, but it was mentioned by me. I heard somewhere this quote 'When you don't give a fllfillment on emotions in piece, people will be much hungry to it, and will click much more replay button' :D Hope it works like this.