"Lovejail" (a piano sonata) - mvmnt. 1

This is my newest piece, something I worked on for a long time. The entire piano sonata is called "Lovejail", and this is the 1st movement. This music was written as I went through a very difficult period in my life, when many things I held dear came crashing down; a period where I caused and received a lot of pain and learned some hard-fought lessons. Despite the pain, this piece is also full of love, and hope for a brighter future. Pain and hope, felt simultaneously. There is no better catharsis for me than to express my anger, regret, shame, hope, aspirations, and dreams through music. I hope this music brings you as much joy as it brought me.

Although the piece is nice...actually a pleasure to listen to, I don't know where melodically you're going.  I hear so many melodies here, they don't seem to be developed altogether.  I hear more of an "overture" of ideas.  You have a full suite hear if you choose to extrapolate all of these wonderful ideas.

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It's not enough to have an arc sometimes and I think this is a perfect example of that. The form is a little loose, and there are plenty of ideas, but harmonically and thematically, it seems like a grab bag of things that could be coherent if put together correctly, like a puzzle. Sometimes it may be the case, but for a piece like this, it's not the audience's job to interpret a vague statement, it's your job to bring it to the table.
Interesting counterpoint and homophony, but could use that little more harmonic development to stand its ground better.