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I found this piece while going through old music seeing what to delete and what to put into one large file of ideas and I see a 900kb music file and I'm like Dafuq? So I click expecting some copy pasted 10 times song and it's this 10 1/2 minutes piece that isn't half bad, and it's a bunch of separate ideas. It's not great but It's not terrible so I thought that maybe someone here would appreciate that I found this after completely forgetting about it.

 

Also I feel Like I've stolen a tune or two from here if anyone recognizes any tune tell me, even if you don't know who.

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There is definitely some good work here, and some that needs revision probably. Found a few notation things not worth mentioning right now. The biggest step to take for this one is to go through it with a critical ear and decide what needs to stay and what needs to go or be re-worked. Think like you have scissors, trim whatever doesn't "fit" the piece, or rework it to fit. Love it when you find work from the past :D

Gustav Johnson

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Monarcheon    275

The idea of unison to homophonic is an interesting one, but it's not super impactful when it only goes off by like one or two deviations, especially in this kind of middle-ish register.
Page 2 had some weird notes in it, especially the 9th measure of it; I don't think your accidentals lined up.
Don't exactly have the time to go over things specifically, but I think you can probably hear them yourself :happy:
I guess my main thing is the chorale-like nature of this piece that only really branches off into heterophony occasionally. I think that's the main thing holding this piece back from really being more powerful (some orchestration things like where your sections deviate to are also an issue but not as much). Chorales work because they're so established in their format that the calmness therein isn't too surprising. The cross hybrid nature of two relatively docile styles is a little bit too shy, I feel.
10 minutes definitely isn't shabby. :blush: Also I can't really hear a melody you took, btw.

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ilv    32

Good job overall. I would have more rhythmic complexity, especially when all parts share the same rhythm. When all parts play in unison, it might be nice to make those spots more harmonious.
0:07: A4 preferred over B4
I'm not going to go over the whole thing, so I'm going to take the word of others.

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