[Old Piece] The Journey

So I wrote this piece at the beginning of last year and, while it's not really my style anymore, I still think it's quite nice so I thought I'd share it. :)

I was fortunate enough to get a performance of it from the Kokoro Ensemble; I do have a recording of the performance but unfortunately, I'm not allowed/don't have the rights to share it on social media and forums. However, I do have a recording of the piece when it was being workshopped (see the mp3 below).

Use of deliberate crossed voices is pulled off well here. Good job; that's not easy.
I would experiment, in your score, with the use of decimal time signatures since sometimes I get the feeling you want is not a subdivision to fit the meter, but a continuous line with an uncomfortable amount extra.
Notation in the beginning with the ties is kind of weird; I'm not sure if it's super necessary to do it that way. Even if you're trying to show the relationships.
Measure before D (C major cadence) was really out of place for me, not exactly in a good way. It might have even been better to transition directly into the fast section and avoid fumbling around with a new fundamental.
The end was a little bit of awkward mode mixture, unsure if the A major was the new I or the IV. Clever, but a little confusing.
Overall, this a great piece. Come back to this style occasionally! It's nice. :)

11 hours ago, Monarcheon said:

Use of deliberate crossed voices is pulled off well here. Good job; that's not easy.
I would experiment, in your score, with the use of decimal time signatures since sometimes I get the feeling you want is not a subdivision to fit the meter, but a continuous line with an uncomfortable amount extra.
Notation in the beginning with the ties is kind of weird; I'm not sure if it's super necessary to do it that way. Even if you're trying to show the relationships.
Measure before D (C major cadence) was really out of place for me, not exactly in a good way. It might have even been better to transition directly into the fast section and avoid fumbling around with a new fundamental.
The end was a little bit of awkward mode mixture, unsure if the A major was the new I or the IV. Clever, but a little confusing.
Overall, this a great piece. Come back to this style occasionally! It's nice. :)

 

Glad you liked it. I've never heard of decimal time signatures. How would I use it and what advantages does it have over writing, say, 3.5/4 as 7/8.

I don't personally use them that often since players and conductors would get mad at me, but when I really want to emphasize the power of the beat, but with a slight alteration, like say a march, I use them to communicate that. Like I said, use them sparingly, because it's definitely not standard and people will get mad at you if it's not totally justified.

Wow, this was really well done. You clearly know what you're doing, @punintentional. I love the instrumentation and the mood of this piece.

I don't really have much to offer in the way of suggestions, other than that, given the preceding complexity, maybe the final chord could be something a bit more spicy than just the simple E Major (adding a sixth, seventh or ninth might achieve what I'm thinking).

Really good work! I'll have to up my game for the summer competition