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My third composition called "Distances"


Viktor

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Do you have a score? That would make the reviewing process alot easier.

The low powerful chords are nice, but when you add more thirds and sixths to them, the notes seem to clash with each other.
Because you repeat the chord progression over and over, the piece becomes boring for me. Adding extra instruments to it, will not solve this problem.
Furthermore, the melody in the violin in circa 2'00 is way too fragile when accompanied by so many low (and loud) instruments.
2'17. Honestly, I don't like these low notes in the piano part. They are disturbing to me.
3'00. Nice anti-climax. The subito piano is clearly contrasting with the previous part.

I think you can work on creating a balance between a clear melody and a clear accompaniment.

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Thanks. I have a request for you if its not a problem for you. 

I would like if you can tell generaly all an all, how is this composition sounding? Good bad average ( for film/movie or game music), couse thats my main goal in my career. Than, what would you have changed in it, and what would you implant in it. But tell it like you would tell to a guy that doesnt know a lot in music exm.(thirds, sixths, sevenths...etc) 

If you could tell me how would it be if the chords doesnt repeat, and what do you mean by "creating balance between a clear melody and a clear accompaniment" 

Thanks, and sorry if i give you hard time explaining and wasting your time. Im not musically educated.

 

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1 hour ago, Viktor said:

Thanks. I have a request for you if its not a problem for you. 

I would like if you can tell generaly all an all, how is this composition sounding? Good bad average ( for film/movie or game music), couse thats my main goal in my career. Than, what would you have changed in it, and what would you implant in it. But tell it like you would tell to a guy that doesnt know a lot in music exm.(thirds, sixths, sevenths...etc) 

If you could tell me how would it be if the chords doesnt repeat, and what do you mean by "creating balance between a clear melody and a clear accompaniment" 

Thanks, and sorry if i give you hard time explaining and wasting your time. Im not musically educated.

I don't see reviewing and explaining as a waste of time, so you don't have to apologise for that. :happy:

Of course, I give my opinion, but it can be that other people disagree with me. In my opinion, the composition has potential. There are good parts and parts that could be improved. I would not say this composition is bad at all.
If you film composition is a main goal in your career you definitely have to work on your musical knowledge, even though you don't compose in a classical way. Thirds and sixths are intervals and intervals are a very important aspect of music. Maybe the following website will help you with the basics: http://www.musiclearningworkshop.com/basic-music-theory-elements/

I see on your profile that you use FL Studio, so you cannot share a score, but again, it is very hard reviewing something when you cannot see what is going on. 

2 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

The low powerful chords are nice, but when you add more thirds and sixths to them, the notes seem to clash with each other.

Maybe transposing the chords in the piano an octave higher will solve this problem.

2 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

Because you repeat the chord progression over and over, the piece becomes boring for me. Adding extra instruments to it, will not solve this problem.

Try to compose other chord progressions and alternate these with the already existing progression. For instance:
When you already have a chord progression like: Cmaj - Fmaj - Gmaj - Cmaj.
Compose another chord progression: Am - Fmaj - Gmaj - Cmaj.

This can make the music more instresting.

4 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

Furthermore, the melody in the violin in circa 2'00 is way too fragile when accompanied by so many low (and loud) instruments.

You have two options here. Either you give the melody in the violin to more instruments, so that it is more present or you have to delete some accompanying instruments.
The first option, doubling, seems to be the best solution.

4 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

2'17. Honestly, I don't like these low notes in the piano part. They are disturbing to me.

Maybe transposing the chords in the piano an octave higher will solve this problem.

4 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

I think you can work on creating a balance between a clear melody and a clear accompaniment.

When omitting all details, one could say that music consist of melody and accompaniment (harmony). In film and popular music the melody is the musical line that can easily be / is sung. In this case the horn and violin have some melodies, while the piano and lower strings have the 'accompanying' or assistant role. In this composition the melody is 'over-blown' by the accompaniment, whith the result that the melody is almost inaudible and you only hear chords.

 

Hopefully, this is all understandable.

 

Best wishes,

Maartne

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