Venezia - violin concerto

This is my first piece in italian style and generally my first concerto (I don't think it's succesful), I write mostly solo music. What do you think? What do I have to improve?

Hi there!

Very nice music, an very impressive first concerto in the Italian baroque language! For the most part you keep to baroque technique and harmony, and that is very fine! Beware of very sudden harmonic changes though (like 01:00, maybe you could make the progression so bar 40 ends with the chord b minor 7? you would only need to change the bass, this would work better with the e major chord). * I would advice you to look over this for the whole piece where you have sudden harmonic changes.

In general there is 3 main areas you can improve:

1. Form:

This is very important for the listener, I know that it sound like Vivaldi have a very free form (it suddenly pops up unexpected stuff, but there is still a ground form. What I have done is to base my concertos more on form, i usually have a Rondo form. Ritonello - Solo  1 - Ritonello (modulated, with variation) - Solo 2 - Ritonello (original) - Solo1 with varation/Cadenza - Ritonello).

I think you would benefit from that, from my point of view you are a "little too much", too much happening, to little base.  One more thing is to let the melodic opportunity decide where it will take you. (see the example)

2. Use of orchestra:

You use a lot of orchestral violins in unison, i think you could write more counterpoint. Its common to double the soloist with the first violin when the ritonello plays. Check your double stops in the violin!!

3. Harmony:

Check your progressions and work on preparing the next chord.

Keep it going, a very good concerto!

Example:

I found one place in you third movement (bar 57) where I think you did not follow the potential of the first motif in the bar. I wrote a little version on it, hope it can give you some ideas on how to move on from you base motif (in this case the first two beats of the solo violin in bar 57).

Edited September 30, 20187 yr by Simen-N

Lovely piece! I like your melodies. I do feel that you could present more dynamic contrast--the relative loudness of the parts is pretty stagnant, and sometimes you don't mark what dynamic a part is supposed to be at. Otherwise, great work!

@Simen-NThank you very much for your advice!  I have very much to learn yet. These double stops are a bit awkward but playable. And I have to say that I really admire your works