Julien_Kaw Posted January 1, 2020 Share Posted January 1, 2020 (edited) Hello Guys ! First of all, HAPPY NEW YEAR !!! I'd like to share with you another of my composition which is " In Limbo " Hope you enjoy it 🙂 Julien Kaw limbes.mp3 Edited January 1, 2020 by Julien_Kaw MP3 Play / pause JavaScript is required. 0:00 0:00 volume > next menu limbes > next Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Monarcheon Posted January 2, 2020 Share Posted January 2, 2020 :12, Em7 ruined with the b9 at the end of the measure. :24, don't make your horn play that. Too many sections with not enough orchestrational development. 1:29-1:37Â is a mess. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Julien_Kaw Posted January 2, 2020 Author Share Posted January 2, 2020 2 hours ago, Monarcheon said: :12, Em7 ruined with the b9 at the end of the measure. :24, don't make your horn play that. Too many sections with not enough orchestrational development. 1:29-1:37Â is a mess. Â Ok thanks you ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Noah Brode Posted January 2, 2020 Share Posted January 2, 2020 Hi, I think there are some nice elements here. I like the minimalist-esque switch-up between triplets and sixteenth notes in the beginning piano riff. The dramatic piano riff after the (kinda crazy) guitar and bass passage is nice too. But, as a whole, it seems kind of frenetic and disconnected. There are a lot of ideas happening in less than two minutes of play time. It's a little hard to judge overall without a musical score -- I think adding a score to your posts will definitely attract more reviews. Just from a practical perspective regarding instrumentation, it seems like there are a lot of instruments that are being used extraneously. I hear a harp, a piano, a string section, a flute, a horn, a human voice, a bass guitar, an electric guitar (?), and drums -- which, if the piece were to be intended for a live performance, would be a lot of musicians to get together to rehearse for a two-minute piece. The flute and the voice specifically seem to be used for only a brief passage. Just some things to consider as you move forward. I also think my comment and Monarcheon's go hand in hand -- if you were to expand this piece into a longer format with more thematic development, you'd also have a chance to spread out that instrumentation and let it breathe, rather than jamming it all into a short amount of time. Just my thoughts -- hope that helps. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Julien_Kaw Posted January 2, 2020 Author Share Posted January 2, 2020 8 minutes ago, Noah Brode said: Hi, I think there are some nice elements here. I like the minimalist-esque switch-up between triplets and sixteenth notes in the beginning piano riff. The dramatic piano riff after the (kinda crazy) guitar and bass passage is nice too. But, as a whole, it seems kind of frenetic and disconnected. There are a lot of ideas happening in less than two minutes of play time. It's a little hard to judge overall without a musical score -- I think adding a score to your posts will definitely attract more reviews. Just from a practical perspective regarding instrumentation, it seems like there are a lot of instruments that are being used extraneously. I hear a harp, a piano, a string section, a flute, a horn, a human voice, a bass guitar, an electric guitar (?), and drums -- which, if the piece were to be intended for a live performance, would be a lot of musicians to get together to rehearse for a two-minute piece. The flute and the voice specifically seem to be used for only a brief passage. Just some things to consider as you move forward. I also think my comment and Monarcheon's go hand in hand -- if you were to expand this piece into a longer format with more thematic development, you'd also have a chance to spread out that instrumentation and let it breathe, rather than jamming it all into a short amount of time. Just my thoughts -- hope that helps.  Thank you ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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