Allegro in G major for Keyboard

Hi this is my first post here but only in this account, I had another one that was called "Aaronbob",

But i had some problems with the email so i created another account, everything should be fine now.

This piece is a re-work of something that i uploaded a month ago, but this time i tried to apply your advice 🙂

it was going to be a rondo, but i decided to study the form well before attempting to compose with it.

i hope you like the little tune, I accept feedback and everything, @Henry Ng Tsz Kiu helped me when i asked him for advice 

so the harmony should be better. ( it's still not "perfect" but maybe now it's decent)

I hope you like my little piece and have a wonderful day ❤️

-Aaron

Hi @44W74l4,

I do find the harmony more reasonable here! I think you are having a clear Tonic-Predominant-Dominant-Tonic harmonic structure here. Personally I have the following thoughts:

-What if change the quaver G note in b.10 to G-E semiquavers for smoother transition?

-In b.14 I feel like it's I instead of IV there. Maybe you can in b.13 the left hand changes to E-F#, dotted crotchet-quaver, then change b.14 LH to G major (G-A-G-F#-E)

-I feel like the iii chord in b.25 less smooth, and I may just change it to a I6 chord with note B less emphasized.

-Nice little imitation in b.29-30!

-Will change the G to A in LH b.42 better?

Thanks for your update!

Henry

5 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

-What if change the quaver G note in b.10 to G-E semiquavers for smoother transition?

-In b.14 I feel like it's I instead of IV there. Maybe you can in b.13 the left hand changes to E-F#, dotted crotchet-quaver, then change b.14 LH to G major (G-A-G-F#-E)

-I feel like the iii chord in b.25 less smooth, and I may just change it to a I6 chord with note B less emphasized.

-Nice little imitation in b.29-30!

-Will change the G to A in LH b.42 better?

 

 

 

I just applied this, and you're right, in B.13 and 14 i thought that when you are like copying an idea to the other hand you have to play the exact notes,i guess i'm wrong 😛

In B.24 i tried to follow the progression; i wasn't aware that u can substitute chords or interrumpt the progression

-b.29-30 hehe i was trying to do that for the whole piece , it sounds funny to hear the high pitched theme on the bass 

-Aaron

I like the clarity of the melodic line as well as the rhythmic variety in the figures. Also the general structure.
I find it a bit unusual that the second part starts with the I chord in first inversion. A piece in this style seems to call for the harmonic shift here to the dominant or some other nearby key.

21 minutes ago, Luis Hernández said:

I like the clarity of the melodic line as well as the rhythmic variety in the figures. Also the general structure.
I find it a bit unusual that the second part starts with the I chord in first inversion. A piece in this style seems to call for the harmonic shift here to the dominant or some other nearby key.

 

Yeah i'm aware of that, I'm learning the basics of form and harmony, i will try to improve that on my next post.

Thank you very much for the feedback 😄

-Aaron

Hi, Aaron

I love your piece. It's relaxing to listen to and it has an impromptu feel to it. I'm a classical composer too so I am endeared to my fellow Haydn/Mozart fans. 

Your theme could become a rondo them but it would need a little more movement and clear harmony. I'll add a short example. 

My advice to composers beginning out on their journey is to look at melody writing. Forget textbooks, YouTube videos are way more helpful. Look at sentences and periods. And learn about schemas. Start composing 8 bar themes with a complementary B section.

A = 8 bars *tonic to dominant

B = 8 to 16 bars *dominant to tonic

You can begin the B section with any inversion in the dominant I believe. You can start a piece with the third in the base if the treble is the 1st or fifth scale degree. I'll include an example although it's actually beginning with V7 of II.