One more try

A small piece that I recently reviewed. Maybe someone will like it.

Edited February 8, 20251 yr by Luis Hernández

Hi @Luis Hernández!

I like the form of the piece!  It seems to start with wide, spread intervals and moves into thirds, then into clusters, then back out to more spread intervals creating a kind of arch-like form.  I do wonder why you chose the meter-less format for this piece.  It seems that many of the parts fit squarely into a 4/4 pattern.  Thanks for sharing!

I love the parallels at bar 15. I think it was smart to use your rhythmic motif too, it helped tie the dissonant nature of this into something I could digest. Well done, Luis.

The undulating eighth motif in the upper notes of the right hand helps glue everything together.  Very rich and atmospheric harmonies.  It feels like rainy day piece.  What were the updates that you made if you don't mind sharing?

And it just occurred to me for the first time that your initials could also stand for "Left Hand" as abbreviated in a keyboard score to show the hands swapping position, and I feel like you should play with that to write your name all over a piece.  😄

20 hours ago, pateceramics said:

The undulating eighth motif in the upper notes of the right hand helps glue everything together.  Very rich and atmospheric harmonies.  It feels like rainy day piece.  What were the updates that you made if you don't mind sharing?

And it just occurred to me for the first time that your initials could also stand for "Left Hand" as abbreviated in a keyboard score to show the hands swapping position, and I feel like you should play with that to write your name all over a piece.  😄

 

Hello, thank you for listening.

This little piece was an exercise I did in a composition course based on contemporary techniques.
Later I made some modifications, really minor, especially in the pauses or prolongation of some notes or chords. 
I hadn't noticed that about LH..... I'll keep it in mind.