Authentic Praise

This work combines orchestral, African, Middle-Eastern, and synth-rock music in a contemporary praise song. I got the influence for this primarily as a result of a video games music concert in which I sang with my choir. There, I found out that music from video games that I never played can actually be exciting, and I decided to write my own song in the style of music from RPG video games. The vocal solo is inspired from the vocals in "Civilization 4", and is in a made up language, though it contains traces from some real-world languages.

Authentic Praise

Well, this is different from what I'm used to seeing on this site and I like it. The first 4 seconds or so reminded me of loading up Katamari Damacy, plus the vocals and guitar solo are nice. However, I don't hear a coherent whole; the sections feel disconnected from each other. What happened to the vocals with words, for example? That voice was used so briefly, and so was the sitar at :36.

Yikes, Black Orpheous is correct: this song feels like you took eight completely different pizzas, took a slice from each one, and made a pie out of each piece :blink:

Don't get me wrong, the "pieces" are all very "tasty" separately, and I liked each piece...but you really should either stick with one theme here, and expand on it well/develop it (and then go on to elaborate on the other themes left out, making entire new songs out of them), or you can find a way to transition better into each piece.

All-in-all, this was really enjoyable (I actually lol'd at the first part of the piece :lol:), thanks for sharing! :D

And welcome to Young Composers, I hope you enjoy the site! Feel free to listen to and comment/offer criticism or suggestions on others' works on this site, they will be sure to appreciate it (and may even return the favor ;))

Interesting track, abitran!

The opening and trumpet sections could use a little more oomph.

Did you record the vocals yourself? I think you can try enunciating the syllables of the speech more to make it sound more convincing.

Interesting combination of styles. I think you could pull off smoother transitions between each style to give the whole track a more unified feel.

It's a very cool, eclectic track, arbitran. Thanks for sharing it with us and welcome to YC!

-John

Groovy!! Way to go :)

I liked this. HOwever, the vocal could have had some structure in vocals. You see 'Baba Yetu' in CIv 4, note that they have a very clear idea of whwat it's about adn what to sing - the Lords Prayer in Swahili :)

Apart from that, not much to say that hasn't already been mentioned, and great work!!

hey, that was very fun to listen! finally something different, and daring, also very humorous

i would even extend and say this should be performed live at some parts, the drumming samples just takes the soul out of the thing at parts. the ending is excellent, great sense of drama. you listen to frank zappa right?

Hello!

As others have pointed out, this is extremely disjointed. Normally that doesn't bother me, but you haven't pulled it off too effectively so it's actually a pretty big detractor for me. Also, the production is messy...your instruments are set at totally bizarre volume levels and they jump around, plus they're not interacting well with each other in the mix -- sometimes entire instruments are being squashed out entirely.

At this point this sounds like little more than a sketch. It's a cool concept, but it's weakened by a significantly messy and disjointed exectution. With some serious polish, you could have a great and innovative track on your hands. Right now though, you're not there yet, so keep working on it.

And please keep commenting on the works of others around here if you'd like them to keep commenting on yours. :)