Song for Me

This is not really what I would class as pop, but I'll let you decide.

Lyrics

Once the dreams and dark are done

Shines the welcome dawn

To heal me with the sun

Because

I have been patient waiting all my life to be here

Silent and hating, I fear the rising of the moon

Lies burn like little stars that tell me time's been wasting

Reminds me that everything will be much clearer soon

I have always wanted to keep something perfect close to me

But I never found out what that something perfect should have been

If you tell me I am only falling from my pedestal

Then the ground would seem a little friendlier, then I can sleep

I have been patient waiting all my life to be here

Silently hating the gentle rising of the jealous moon

If you could just tell me something only I can understand

I'd be sure to tell you something good

Give me a moment, I'll make it special

If you would just give me something only I hold in my hand

I'd be sure to give you something good

Give me a moment, I'll make it perfect

I have been patiently waiting all my life to be here

Silently hating the rising of the moon

There have been little signs that leave me hesitating

But I just didn't see the moment passed too soon

If you could just tell me something only I might understand

If you would I'll tell you something good

Give me a moment, I'll make it special

If you would just give me something only I hold in my hand

I'd be sure to give you something good

Give me a moment, I'll make it special

Give me a moment, I'll make it perfect.

I have always tried to hold that something perfect close to me

But I never found out what that something perfect should have been

Send a sign that tells me I'm not falling for your perfect lies

Then all the moons most silvered coins could never pay for what that buys.

Because

I have been patiently waiting

All my life to be here.

Edited January 25, 20179 yr by Mark101

I would classify it as pop, with benefits. It's not bad, Mark.

Well then, pop with benefits lol, I like it.  Thanks Ken.  I think I still want to add some variation, it all sounds a bit uniform but it's hard to tell what it would sound like recorded properly.  I always imagined it with a female voice too.  I love Tori Amos and that was the style that influenced the song.  For me she is one of the more interesting song writers, she actually bothers to tell a story and her musical writing is always a bit more involved than the run of the mill pop, churned out day after day.

Best regards

Mark

12 hours ago, Ken320 said:

I would classify it as pop, with benefits. It's not bad, Mark.

 

it's not populair, so it's not pop!

Now that you mention it, I hear the resemblance. She tends to favor raw emotion over what I would call "a really good song." I can't think of any male artist equivalent.

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2 hours ago, Ken320 said:

She tends to favor raw emotion over what I would call "a really good song."

Now there's a double edged compliment if ever I heard one lol.  I can't think of a male equivalent either and I spent some time thinking, strange!

Hi Casper,

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6 hours ago, Casper Belier said:

it's not populair, so it's not pop

Not so double edged with this one lol

What would you call this genre, just out of interest

What would you call this? Is it so important what you call it?

I think I would call this a sort of folk music derivative, and you're right, it's not important at all what you call the genre, I think that point got a bit over stressed, I was just curious about what Casper said, since I said I didn't think it was pop exactly, and then you said it was, with benefits, then Casper said it wasn't lol.

I don't know this girl but I like the music, whatever it is lol.  I might look out for some more of her work, thanks.

Best regards

Mark

Edited January 27, 20179 yr by Mark101

I just wanted you to know that I was talking in general terms bout Tori Amos, and not specifically about your piece. It's very easy to misunderstand things in cyberspace. however, if you have a melody for this piece, you should repost it so that we can appraise it fully and honestly.

Hi Ken, Don't worry, I didn't take anything to heart, I was just joking about the double edged compliment, it stuck me as amusing

I actually have a version of the piece for guitar and flute where the melody is more apparent than in the piano version but I don't have it converted to mp3 yet, I may do that later, but as I said before, I want to iron out some of the uniformity I think first before I upload it again.  Did you have the impression that it needs a bridge or something, I'm not sure what it is that it's missing or where, but I would be interested to know what you think.

Best regards

Mark