Op106 Nr4

Hello everyone, this is the piece I newly composed, hope you like it.

Edited July 29, 20178 yr by cloud10000
for some adjustment

Hi

I think it's very nice. Good work with both instruments. Perhaps I would have given more presence to the piano (but it has). Sometimes the harmony is a bit vague, although it reaches to an end. 

Violin: The octaves in m. 24 onwards... Are necessary? The quick figure in m. 63 with leaps, stacatto, thirds and seconds, perhaps is too demanding.

Piano: I don't like to use so many octaves (m. 196 - m. 211), but that's my taste... (I prefer having a strong reason for those -many- octaves).

m. 27, please use octaves sparingly. They're not really used for harmonic structure when it comes to violin music, more a display.
m. 44, careful of non-harmonic tone in violin vs. bass (Bb vs. B).
m. 63, yeah... not really worth practicing that.
m. 144-section, a little bit awkward and definitely less fluid than the rest of the piece.
m. 163, possible, but nasty to play.
mm. 169-178, seemed random and not really in place.
I also felt the theme could have been handled a little bit better in the main instances, but it's good overall. 

I must say I'm speechless. The opening is quite rustic and lays an expectation that the piece is simple. I like the opening. The simple theme -in my mind- has a lot of potential development possibilities. However, as the piece went on, the theme disappeared. Replaced by another idea... then another... then another. Finally, it reappears at measure 179.... undeveloped and untouched. I think this piece is an awesome example of why brevity of idea and focus on structure and development are important to composition. The bounce in material and lack of compositional focus and direction is very evident in this work. You have good ideas, but they aren't utilized to their potential -and the work is left with a sense of not being finished.