My Dramatic ensemble compositions

Falling Stars.mp3This is my first dramatic composition I've been working on.

What do you think?

Didn't sound that dramatic to me.

Sounds more like you've been asked to make an opening song for Castelvania anime or something.

It borrows a lot from pop music (not necessarily what's popular now, I mean easy rock and things like that),

the only thing that doesn't sound like pop/easy rock music is the instrumentation,

which is why it makes me think of Castelvania.

Also it sounds a bit like these Japanese games at some places.

Ok now that it got to the end I see that it's a loop.

You had a video game in mind, didn't you?

I took inspiration from some Mario music like the final battles in the the last three Mario and Luigi games (not inclucing the remake). Come to think of it, I don't know why I didn't end it with a cadence.

I have added a cadence and adjusted audio levels.

Not really dramatic: It does flow however like video game music. (nothing is wrong with that)

1) Write the strings for full orchestra, not violins.  

2) with the aforementioned, make sure you write "divisi" so they know how you want it played (if you wanted that)

3) Your piano part seems more improvised than an actually melody.  If that is the case then write the changes so the pianist knows.