Opus Sleep

Brief lullaby section of a children's story with music. 

Edited July 26, 20187 yr by Cappielly
Updated

Should be written as one instrument:

Also you might want to use the pedal instead if what you did on the lower bars.

From the way it's written I assume that you played it with a midi keyboard on another program and then exported a midi file and opened it on your notation software?

Happens to me when I move from Cub to Sib but I might be wrong...

Let me give it another listen.

Watch these:

Try and play them alone on a piano,

they might sound muddy, which usually doesn't work in a lullaby.

Although many lullabies are dark so I don't know.

I uploaded an audio to let you hear how it sound like.

Don't connect these, it looks like a tie rather than a slur:

Also you can't really play a legato there,

you have to lift your finger in order to play again.

I think that's it,

other than that the writing is good,

you develop your melody without staying too far off,

although if that is a song for children you might want to make it repeat a bit more.

What happens here is what happens most times when one begins to write for the piano (it takes lots of time, I swear): it sounds hard because of the verticality of the notes in both hands. Apart from that the melody is good.

Thanks for the responses! Score/Mp3 updated. I haven't written anything for quite a while and seems I need to relearn a great deal.