October 6, 20187 yr This piece was the inspiration for nocturne 2. It is meant to convey a depressing atmosphere. I'm sure there are several improvements. Feedback is appreciated.
October 7, 20187 yr It's very nice. I enjoyed listening to this. You manage to convey a mood of the night brilliantly, and your harmonies are absolutely wonderful. My one comment would be about its lack of melody. I don't know if you are trying to write a traditional nocturne, but they are all very melodious. Once again, well done. I did really enjoy listening to it so thank you.
October 13, 20187 yr Very nice music. The first 16 bars include material that don't appear again ¿? I't like an intro. 2/8 is a bit weird.
October 15, 20187 yr Overall, I really like this piece. The language is unique, too. I like the way you use the major 7th scales throughout the piece, it is dreamy, yet strangely depressing. I do have some qualms. Measure 6 has awkward bass voicing. I'd recommend the Fb on the first beat in the left hand be sent an octave down. Measures 7-12 are mostly fine, the playback itself isn't doing you favors. The treble should be quieter and let the bass come through. Measure 9, I don't like the third beat having a 3rd -> unison resolution. It sounds a little "weak." Measures 17-51 are really effective. Almost whimsical and innocent, yet melancholic. The happy parts that lighten up the piece ... I think it detracts from the atmosphere. Development is a good thing, I just felt like it didn't fit with the piece. I appreciate your use of silence, by the way. Thanks for sharing this, I really enjoyed listening to this 🙂
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