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I would say that the ostinato on the piano isn't very compelling. It feels kinda random and I'd change the pedal tone to suit the chords better. The drums also feel out of place; I'd expect more toms, taikos, etc. than a drum kit, which is especially jarring because there is no bassline. Another big problem is that the piece does not have a consistent build like most "Epic" pieces. If it's an epic piece that doesn't have that trailer-style build, then it needs to be much clearer in song-structure and the chorus needs to be significantly bigger than everything else. 

I'd say this piece is a great example of that.

Your piece however, doesn't really have this big theme to build up to. In fact, the piece doesn't really have much melody at all.

The biggest issue, production-wise, is that the sequencing of the instruments is noticeably fake. The guitar and strings, specifically; the former is especially egregious because electric guitars are extremely-tough to sequence, it isn't double tracked like metal guitars almost always are (thus lacking that wide, stereo sound), and it has way too much gain and mid-scoop and therefore sounds like a swarm of angry bees. 

I hope some of this helps

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On 5/18/2019 at 7:41 PM, AngelCityOutlaw said:

I would say that the ostinato on the piano isn't very compelling. It feels kinda random and I'd change the pedal tone to suit the chords better. The drums also feel out of place; I'd expect more toms, taikos, etc. than a drum kit, which is especially jarring because there is no bassline. Another big problem is that the piece does not have a consistent build like most "Epic" pieces. If it's an epic piece that doesn't have that trailer-style build, then it needs to be much clearer in song-structure and the chorus needs to be significantly bigger than everything else. 

I'd say this piece is a great example of that.

Your piece however, doesn't really have this big theme to build up to. In fact, the piece doesn't really have much melody at all.

The biggest issue, production-wise, is that the sequencing of the instruments is noticeably fake. The guitar and strings, specifically; the former is especially egregious because electric guitars are extremely-tough to sequence, it isn't double tracked like metal guitars almost always are (thus lacking that wide, stereo sound), and it has way too much gain and mid-scoop and therefore sounds like a swarm of angry bees. 

I hope some of this helps

 

Hello!! thanks for listening and criticism! uff yes i know two steps!!  they are professionals,, i a simple novice.. but im going to improve. Thanks!

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