Echo of falling water

I wrote this for school. Basically we were tasked to make an art piece about water (there’s a bit more to it, but that’s the jist). Sorry the performance is kind of sloppy. This will probably be in a collection of water-inspired pieces (I already have ideas for two others)

Edited August 10, 20223 yr by jejrekmek

Youre gonna change the world soon at this pace. Congratulations on such a moving work! Reminds me of Une Barque Sur L'Ocean but honestly I find this more interesting. 

Edited May 16, 20223 yr by Left Unexplained

4 minutes ago, Left Unexplained said:

Youre gonna change the world soon at this pace. 

 

lol. I have no idea how I went from this https://www.youngcomposers.com/t42649/nocturne-in-d-flat-major/ to this without even a single completed composition in between 

8 minutes ago, Left Unexplained said:

 Congratulations on such a moving work! Reminds me of Une Barque Sur L'Ocean but honestly I find this more interesting. 

 

Thank you so much! I'm glad you found this moving because the last time I tried writing something moving it wasn't that good.  I was actually worried that the  theme at 1:45 sounded too similar to Une Barque Sur L'Ocean. but either way I can't believe you found a piece by me more interesting than  one by ravel

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Edited August 10, 20223 yr by jejrekmek

I like this piece. Nice flavor (impressionism) and changes, as in 0:50.

Good use of the piano, very idiomatic

On 5/15/2022 at 6:12 PM, jejrekmek said:

I wrote this for school.

Please tell me you're 40-something and a non-traditional student going back to college/university. That way I feel a little better about myself as a composer.

On 5/15/2022 at 6:12 PM, jejrekmek said:

Sorry the performance is kind of sloppy.

Akin to da Vinci apologizing for the half-smile on the Mona Lisa's face.

All right, but enough joking. Let's get real here. This is a superb piece of musical impressionism. The rapid, shimmering arpeggios trickle from the rich, harmonious chambers you establish throughout the piece. And such harmonies! It's so refreshing to find a composer who isn't afraid of where his/her chords may take him/her. Artfulness combined with thoughtfulness produces a work that is believable, human, relatable. I believed this piece. It struck a chord (pun not intended) within me and I saw me for who I am. Human. A drop of falling water.

Despite my hope that you're a seasoned composer (in age, at least), I strongly suspect you are much younger. That being the case, I will offer a smidgen of advice, if that's okay. What you produced here is very good. In my opinion, it is art. Fine art. However, impressionism relies on subtlety; otherwise, it becomes realism and little more than a direct "transcription" of non-musical sounds into music. (Vivaldi's Four Seasons comes to mind — fantastic work of music, yet the aural imagery is a bit on the nose.) As you bring these impressionist works to life, think about the subtleties, the nuances of the imagery you wish to convey. Yes, water makes a distinct sound when it falls. Sparkling, shimmering — effectively captured in quickly arpeggiated chords. But what other impressions does it make? Impressionism seeks to capture not the literal representation of the sound, but the "impression" of it. The thoughts, the emotions, the unused senses. ("Ah, so that's what falling water smells like!") And that is achieved through subtlety.

Blah, blah, blah. Enough rambling.

To be clear, this is a beautiful piece of music: beautifully performed and beautifully written. I'm very impressed with your style and look forward to your future works! Thank you for sharing.

Best,

Jörfi

Edited June 3, 20223 yr by Tónskáld

3 hours ago, Tónskáld said:

Please tell me you're 40-something and a non-traditional student going back to college/university. That way I feel a little better about myself as a composer.

I'm 14

3 hours ago, Tónskáld said:

Despite my hope that you're a seasoned composer (in age, at least), I strongly suspect you are much younger. That being the case, I will offer a smidgen of advice, if that's okay. What you produced here is very good. In my opinion, it is art. Fine art. However, impressionism relies on subtlety; otherwise, it becomes realism and little more than a direct "transcription" of non-musical sounds into music. (Vivaldi's Four Seasons comes to mind — fantastic work of music, yet the aural imagery is a bit on the nose.) As you bring these impressionist works to life, think about the subtleties, the nuances of the imagery you wish to convey. Yes, water makes a distinct sound when it falls. Sparkling, shimmering — effectively captured in quickly arpeggiated chords. But what other impressions does it make? Impressionism seeks to capture not the literal representation of the sound, but the "impression" of it. The thoughts, the emotions, the unused senses. ("Ah, so that's what falling water smells like!") And that is achieved through subtlety.

Blah, blah, blah. Enough rambling.

To be clear, this is a beautiful piece of music: beautifully performed and beautifully written. I'm very impressed with your style and look forward to your future works! Thank you for sharing.

Best,

Jörfi

 

Thank you so much for the advice! I haven't written anything impressionist before this, so this is my first time.  I'm glad you're so impressed with this piece. It's definitely the best thing I've ever composed, and will probably be the key to unlocking my style.

3 hours ago, Tónskáld said:

The thoughts, the emotions, the unused senses.

 

How emotionally effective was the buildup that starts at 4:18 and everything after that?

12 minutes ago, jejrekmek said:

I'm 14

I hate you. (Joking, of course. You're obviously a prodigy.)

4 minutes ago, jejrekmek said:

How emotionally effective was the buildup that starts at 4:18 and everything after that?

It felt like I was listening to something by a much older composer. Y'know, like Debussy or Ravel. The kind of composers I wish I could emulate.

In other words, very effective.