Hello, Welcome !
I'm a little new, like you, but I'm twice your age...
So congratulations first of all, because everything I hear here is of great mastery.
I will write my comments as I listen:
During my listening:
The opening is fluid and natural. You create the initial wait, before bringing in the mysterious and animated aspect. The instrumentation is faithful to the necessities. Well organized. The climax seems to announce a bit like in the GureLieder of Schönberg, with these small bird songs.
Beautiful modulation around 4.30 that was long in coming.
I like the overlay hung on the pedal around 5.10. Very well imagined (a kind of modulating harmony that I call "by overflow"). Superb Ravellian progression towards 6'10. All this is very French say so!... Haha.
Trumpet solo well in his place. and lyricism that follows really makes you think of the end of "ma mère l'oie".
Arrival of a more chopped episode.
Then rest around 8'14. Once again, ravelian progression. Well done bravo. The orchestral expansion towards the treble is great. Superb harmonic progression again! Around 10' and well fell back on the oboe solo. (hello Ravel)... (a little Canteloube side too, I don't know if you know, his melodies for voice and orchestra are fantastic).
New phase a little more moving with the string tremolos around 12. We feel the energies gathering towards the end. Suspens.. How are you going to bring the final bouquet? I’m waiting...He arrives by a very well written appeasement. Denier trumpet solo, to the unknown soldier. the cinema is not far away.
After my listening:
All this is very well done. You have a very natural flow and we spend a quarter of an hour listening to all this without seeing the time go by.
The rhapsodic side is close to a continuous improvisation, which lets you spare suspended phases where the motifs are expressed very well.
And what I particularly like about your writing is a very personal harmonization, a little by overflow, with progressions (for example towards 8), it is a huge strong point of your language in my opinion.
Two small things perhaps to consider for a fairly long piece (they are general remarks and I also apply these criticisms to myself, so don't see any negative judgment):
- The driving aspect of the orchestra. The orchestra is a big machine that can become static. It always seems important to me to try to find elements that give direction, which can be simple motives, counterpoint, ostinatos, tremolo, or various other means. They are not necessarily necessary, but can precisely guide towards more movement, become a bit like fuel.
- The thematic or motivic emergence. Work on a long form is also the place of work on the auditor's memory. It is then very interesting to use a form of thematic construction, which can also be reduced to simple motifs (then an embryonic theme). This activates sometimes unconscious areas of the listener and can act as benchmarks. See how important it is in the great symphonists ( Mahler's themes are epic, childish, tragic characters, who engage whole through colossal movements, in Bruckner, they are not necessarily melodic themes but rather truncated motifs that stack and function a little systematically like harmonic marches, in Sibélius, the motifs seem like micro organisms, then suddenly emerges THE great theme That takes away just like a basalt river
In any case, bravissimo, it's great to listen to all this. Long live this forum!