J.L.G...
Thank you for the listen and comments! They mean a lot to me. You clearly know your business.
As for the 1st inversions. That first chord really sets the character for the theme--a little whistful, indefinite. So the first reason, and the major reason for most of what ended up in this (where I had intention) was how it SOUNDED. I'm a Mendelssohn fan, and the 1st inversion just seemed in character. Henry has also been on me, and I did make a few changes early. But to be honest, I like it. Root position seems a little overly strident...
So, am I to understand-- and I read this NOWHWERE--that composers use root postion chords?-- Period. If I were to review the literature, this is what I would find? Seems a waste of harmonic resources. Of course, it makes the mental work a heck of a lot easier.
I'm just not understanding the whys. Are there exceptions? Ever? Even POP songs don't religiously hold to root position (outside of AC/DC and the heavy metal types...).
The pauses at a approx 1:14 and 5:10 were for dramatic effect prior to the more elaborate closing cadence. I could eaisly fill it with notes/anacrusis but I think it would weaken the entry. Maybe wrong, but I do have a reason. Again, my ear likes it. Though I will admit, writing less choppy and more through-composed segments is on my list of priorities.
I'm glad you like the return/transposition to the A theme! So did I. It came to me when I was going off to sleep, as some of these problem's solution do. And the first attempt held. The problem? The return is in D! The dominant! I liked it so much, and it seemed right, so I just went with it. The sonics came off different, giving the return a bit of a brighter feel. REAL string players would definitely give it a different feel! Henry brought up the idea of an attaca move ot the last movement (D). This would work fine and cover my faux pas. On the other hand, if it works? I wanted a light scherzo in A to follow...
Anyhow. In my defense, this is my 3rd piece. I was honestly so pleased with the modulation IN/OUT of the minor that I didn't want to tempt fate. I DEFINTELY will pay more attention moving forward.
All that said, maybe my personal preferences-- 1st inversions, dramatic pauses, weird modulations...begin to form my own style. I mean, short of things being flat out WRONG? If I write and harmonize melodies like everybody else, listeners can go listen to anybody else...
Thank you for the compliments-- I played violin for some time and know it somewhat well, on top of listening, and string quartet collecting is a hobby within this hobby, so I'm sure both helped a good deal as far a making the string writing effect to the extent it is. I am very fond of the rocking, grinding triplets harmonizing the minor section....
Frankly, I am BURNT OUT on this piece right now. I am working up the ideas for the 1st movement: minor key intro, building up from a single voice (cello) fugato (Im thinking Harlod in Italy---LOVE the intro from Hector), then D major unison statement....all convention for the literature, but it will obviously be a first for me....Exciting, exhausting, fueling, consuming at the same time!
I'm considering formal piano lessons with a side of theory/composiiton. My technique is a limit on compositional execution of ideas, and frankly I'd like to be a lot better at sight reading.
I'm glad you characterize this piece as having potential! It started as a bit of a dog, but I worked through a lot of problems until it started to sound right. Also thinking it might be the experience of a lifetime if I got a few movements together and funded a workshop with actual musicians to play through them. Just a thought. I would like to revist this when the 1st movement is done and revise it in light of the 1st and the critiques I've received. Maybe consider it then? See if it is **literally** worth it. Cetainly an incentive to work hard!
Thank you again for your time and comments! Trust me, I know it is a precious commodity...