Luis Hernández Posted November 6, 2016 Share Posted November 6, 2016 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Monarcheon Posted November 7, 2016 Share Posted November 7, 2016 For the first one especially, sometimes I can't tell the mood. Some clashing tones (A# and B for example) don't initially fit I suppose. The ending was also a bit abrupt (and on the 6th?). On the whole though, it was a pleasant movement. I think the second is one of my favorite things you've ever written. Great playing with phrase lengths and a lot of really cool progressions, all within the realm of beauty. In measure 50, I'm wondering why the Bmi7 chord has an F natural in it? Also was a little confused by m. 65's suspension. But it was really quite lovely writing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luis Hernández Posted November 7, 2016 Author Share Posted November 7, 2016 5 hours ago, Monarcheon said: I think the second is one of my favorite things you've ever written. Great playing with phrase lengths and a lot of really cool progressions, all within the realm of beauty. In measure 50, I'm wondering why the Bmi7 chord has an F natural in it? Also was a little confused by m. 65's suspension. But it was really quite lovely writing. Yes, the F natural is a mistake... I don't know how it happened because I had to write it on purpose¿? Regarding the G7sus - C... I know the logical progression is G7sus - G7 - C... But it doesn't have to be so (always). Here G7sus4 is subdominant, that's all. To anticipate the C in the melody the G7 would clash. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Casper Belier Posted November 7, 2016 Share Posted November 7, 2016 thanks for the tunes! first one is a bit odd like the monarch said.but interesting, i was thinking, why not play the melodie on the guitar, but eventually you made her sing it.and man, for the second one, very nice melody and chords, that 5 over 3 was amazing, i will think of this when working in 3/4 next time. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
markstyles Posted December 11, 2016 Share Posted December 11, 2016 I love the 2nd piece. very beautiful.. I'm trying to pinpoint the emotions I feel when I hear it.. There's a dignity about it.. also something uplifting with a tiny tad of 'sadnesss'.. You've quite a grasp on arranging, evoking feelings.. Your pieces are short, almost fragile.. but also a durabilty to them.. They are tougher than they sound.. Like a rock solid female athlete who is wearing a frilly fragile dress. The song is slightly deceiving in a good way. (that's not a good way of putting it).. It states something, but there is also an undertow of another message in there too.. Intriguing is what I would say.. Love it.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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