Lazin' About On The Day Before Monday

Doesn't actually use a Hawaiin Lap Steel but instead an electric piano with pitch bends.  

Got really intrigued with pitch bending after discovering the sounds of the Lap Steel in music such as "Sleep Walk" and "Hawaiian Blues".

Lazin' about on the day before Monday.mp3

Lazin' about on the day before Monday.pdf

Nice smooth jazz chart, it seems almost like a "fake"--a reduced transcription of a melody or chart that jazz musicians comp from and perform with. Reason it seems that way to me is that you're going for a jazz feel, but it's pretty straight. A live performer would have no idea taking this and embellishing some of the rhythms and filling in the gaps, but as a computer performance it stays mostly on one level. As per notation, not sure why you notated the drums in eighth note/eighth rests instead of just sticking with quarter notes. It works, but it's less common than quarter notes. Also, transposing scores are nice, please! :) About your jazz harmony, you might experiment with some ii-V-I progressions and "tri-tone" substitutions in places to break up the repetition. It's got some potential, to take it to the next level try performing each part yourself and mark the changes you'd like to see as a performer.

This is like ear candy, I can't stop eating it  haha.... Gotta love easy listening jazz!

Keep writing!

Gustav Johnson

This is lovely! Mr. Johnson's harmonic critiques are great as well. :)
Specific places that threw me off... piano chords at and m. 15 where you have the sax resolve from the minor 6th, but not the piano.
Also, I was always taught to avoid having a melody end at the tonic unless it's one of those "moments", but that could have been just because it was all modern jazz where the rules are a lot more broad.
It's really nice to listen to. Great work.