February 21, 20179 yr Hello, I composed this piano song six months ago. I decided to share it here to get some feedback. I love this community because somene listens to my songs and share their impressions.
February 21, 20179 yr It's clever the use of broken octaves to be a heartbeat, compared to Stauss's "Death and Transfiguration" with constant syncopation, at least that's how I interpreted it. There are a lot of clever chord progressions thrown about in here, which I really appreciate. However, I would suggest adding more of an arc with the music. It dynamically remains at about the same level and the texture stays about the same throughout the entire piece. And I understand how ostinato is a good way to convey your message, but I think it can really go places, since you have such a great template here. Cheers!
February 22, 20179 yr I agree with M about the arc. This work is reminiscent of Michael Nyman's score for The Piano, which itself was static in the long haul. But he wasn't encumbered by the bass line you chose. I think you could keep almost everything here as is, but change up the bass line and simply reduce the number of repetitive octaves and replace them with anything but. A minor 9th, here and there perhaps. But in general I like it.
February 23, 20179 yr Actually I think the octaves at some point were exagerated, but good rhythm construction. I dont feel the melody travelling as much I think it should be but some chord progressions were very good, specially that part when the octaves stop. Good job and continue composing!
February 26, 20179 yr Author Dear Monarch, Ken and Martim, Thanks for your comments. I really appreciate your comments since there is noone around me that can give such useful feedbacks. I think you're right about the arc. I'll keep working on this piece and consider your suggestions.
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