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Hi everyone,

Here's a short piece for piano trio I wrote over the summer. Let me know what you think and things I should keep in mind for future pieces.

A clearer PDF score is attached below.

Thanks!
J Shu

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Believe it or not, to be technically correct, in the beginning, your right hand needs to be a different time signature from the left, since the left hand is playing a compound quadruple, but you right hand, as it's written would have to be playing quadruple octuple; or that it's playing simple triple within that eighth note framework. 
You have a good sense of direction to your music, and it comes out in the exposition really well. It gets a little bit lost in the development because it's throwing too many variables in the mix with the polyrhythm and motivic sense at the same times, rather than building on them.
I would let your piano part branch out a little bit more. It's currently pretty static in its role, while the strings move around quite a bit. It's tempting to keep it this way since the piano can play the most notes, but if everything blends, then there will be no such need for that trope. Nice work.

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It's really nice to listen to in the background but (just from what I hear, it's probably an absolute sin) I would delete bar 64, it just seems like it should finish there, can't really explain why.

Overall, really nice! :)

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Thank you both for taking the time to listen to and review my piece!

@Monarcheon--I believe form is my biggest weakness as a composer, and I hope to be more strategic about mapping my pieces in the future. Currently, I pretty much rely on instinct and experimentation, but it might be helpful to study some tried-and-true formulas, with which I can construct sustainable long-form pieces. Would you mind sharing how you began experimenting with musical form in composition?

@Leander20null1--I definitely see your point of view. Personally, I like the effect of that augmented chord, as it echoes some harmonic patterns that appeared previously in the piece. I will keep it for now, but I might change my mind over time...

Happy New Year!

J Shu

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I thought this was a nice piece! The harmonies in the beginning made me think of Fauré's In Paradisum, though this is not a bad thing at all -- just something that stood out to me. I didn't particularly mind the form you laid out either. I can definitely see the piano being a little 'static' at times, and I agree with the comment on bar 64 -- it seems to slow things down a bit. I am a very meticulous writer, re-composing pieces from scratch several times, and I think experimenting with that opens up some cool ideas sometimes. Overall, I enjoyed the piece!

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