Composition Feedback

Your critical feedback is highly appreciated. 

All instruments were programmed. 

I don't know why,

I just didn't enjoy it.

I think that your previous one was better.

But maybe I'm just tired.

If you'll remind me, I'll listen again in Wednesday

(tomorrow is a long day too)

It didn't sound so good at the beginning (first 20 seconds), I just didn't like it so much.

As for the mood of the song ... to me, it sounds like a calm melody - I almost started sleeping while listening to it, but besides that, it has some kind of a hopeful, but also a dark feel. In my opinion, it is not adventurous, heroic and energetic.

I would maybe listen to the track again, maybe, but I would surely skip the first 20 seconds.

The song is good, but just not my type. Sorry.

To me, this sounds like an track I would here from an adventure movie. Definitely from a certain Japanese composer...

I mean........ it sounds like a "sterotypical" Asian martial arts-type movie soundtrack. I like it a lot!!!!!!! Do you make movies(anime, short film, documentary, etc) , I would LOVE to dip my toe in the process of making a soundtrack! Message me if you are interested.

10 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

I don't know why,

I just didn't enjoy it.

I think that your previous one was better.

But maybe I'm just tired.

If you'll remind me, I'll listen again in Wednesday

(tomorrow is a long day too)

 

Sure... @Rabbival507

Edited May 29, 20187 yr by Rajarajan_Official

I mean........ it sounds like a "sterotypical" Asian martial arts-type movie soundtrack. I like it a lot!!!!!!! Do you make movies(anime, short film, documentary, etc) , I would LOVE to dip my toe in the process of making a soundtrack! Message me if you are interested.

I do make short films and documentaries! 🙂

Edited May 29, 20187 yr by Rajarajan_Official

4 hours ago, Youngc said:

7 hours ago, Kvothe said:

To me, this sounds like an track I would here from an adventure movie. Definitely from a certain Japanese composer...

 

Could I know the name of the composer? I'm mostly just inspired by Toshio Masuda

 

 

10 hours ago, Dimitrije005 said:

It didn't sound so good at the beginning (first 20 seconds), I just didn't like it so much.

As for the mood of the song ... to me, it sounds like a calm melody - I almost started sleeping while listening to it, but besides that, it has some kind of a hopeful, but also a dark feel. In my opinion, it is not adventurous, heroic and energetic.

I would maybe listen to the track again, maybe, but I would surely skip the first 20 seconds.

The song is good, but just not my type. Sorry.

 

Thanks for the feedback! 

First, please don't post music for review on my profile. If I can get to it, I'll get to it.
Second, the music suffers from a. an incomplete blend of harmonic styles and b. the stratification of stylistic devices.
People are saying they don't like the beginning because of the overlap between the D major and minor modes you use, and I can't say I disagree with them. It's just not a very effective way to set up the piece, especially since it never comes back again. The last thing you want is to make the opening unidiomatic. There are better ways to blend the two scales through the use of a compound mode, but not both of them overlapping. It just sounds jarring here.
Secondly, the styles are very varied and I'm not sure if it's for the better. The second section with the percussion was pretty okay, but the piano sections don't blend with anything else in the track before the reprisal of the second section. Also it harmonically becomes very cliched without much thought to varying it at all. That much I can tell. What "sounds good" isn't always the best answer.
All in all, the track is extremely unfocused, regardless of how it was compositionally put together. You have a lot of good material to work with, it just doesn't blend.

1 minute ago, Monarcheon said:

First, please don't post music for review on my profile. If I can get to it, I'll get to it.
Second, the music suffers from a. an incomplete blend of harmonic styles and b. the stratification of stylistic devices.
 People are saying they don't like the beginning because of the overlap between the D major and minor modes you use, and I can't say I disagree with them. It's just not a very effective way to set up the piece, especially since it never comes back again. The last thing you want is to make the opening unidiomatic. There are better ways to blend the two scales through the use of a compound mode, but not both of them overlapping. It just sounds jarring here.
Secondly, the styles are very varied and I'm not sure if it's for the better. The second section with the percussion was pretty okay, but the piano sections don't blend with anything else in the track before the reprisal of the second section. Also it harmonically becomes very cliched without much thought to varying it at all. That much I can tell. What "sounds good" isn't always the best answer.
All in all, the track is extremely unfocused, regardless of how it was compositionally put together. You have a lot of good material to work with, it just doesn't blend.

 

Apologies for posting on your timeline. And I REALLY appreciate your critical feedback, it helps a lot. Thank you so much for taking the time to look into it! 🙂

I actually liked the opening and expected a tense energetic piece which then didn't materialise. So I think the problem is the disconnect between the opening and the rest, especially in a piece as short as this one. (Thinking about it, this is what @Monarcheon alluded to: "especially since it never comes back again.") Also, the later parts feel a bit generic and lack tension. This all could still make sense if it illustrates a certain story or film sequence. That said, you have a lot of good ideas and are also quite good at blending instrumental sounds together. There is a lot of potential there.

21 minutes ago, Willibald said:

I actually liked the opening and expected a tense energetic piece which then didn't materialise. So I think the problem is the disconnect between the opening and the rest, especially in a piece as short as this one. (Thinking about it, this is what @Monarcheon alluded to: "especially since it never comes back again.") Also, the later parts feel a bit generic and lack tension. This all could still make sense if it illustrates a certain story or film sequence. That said, you have a lot of good ideas and are also quite good at blending instrumental sounds together. There is a lot of potential there.

 

Thank you for taking the time to listen and give your feedback. And yes, there was a particular movie sequence in mind when it was made. 🙂

I was more along the thinking of composer who works with Studio Ghibli films: Joe Hirisahi.

11 hours ago, Kvothe said:

I was more along the thinking of composer who works with Studio Ghibli films: Joe Hirisahi.

 

I see.

On 5/29/2018 at 1:04 AM, Rabbival507 said:

I don't know why,

I just didn't enjoy it.

I think that your previous one was better.

But maybe I'm just tired.

If you'll remind me, I'll listen again in Wednesday

(tomorrow is a long day too)

 

You told me to remind you to listen to the track again. @Rabbival507

12 minutes ago, Rajarajan_Official said:

You told me to remind you to listen to the track again. @Rabbival507

 

Oh yea I forgot.

Will give it a listen now.

Ok.

So- it's nice. 

I liked the solo piano part, but didn't like the sound of that... violin? that appears right at the beginning.

I really don't have anything else to say about it.

Its fine, 5/10. 

Sorry I can't really help you with that.

21 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

Oh yea I forgot.

Will give it a listen now.

 

Ok.

So- it's nice. 

I liked the solo piano part, but didn't like the sound of that... violin? that appears right at the beginning.

I really don't have anything else to say about it.

Its fine, 5/10. 

Sorry I can't really help you with that.

 

Thanks for your feedback!