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Beautiful piece, very emotional and delicate! I like how the deep rumblings contrast with the tinkling high notes, as if foreboding something ominous (like winter, perhaps). The piece is aptly named, good job!

Musically, however, it's a little confusing. I'm not entirely sure if we're in A-flat major or F minor, since you rely heavily on non-tonic notes throughout. (If that was your intent, then I congratulate you!) There were also some chromatics that jarred my ear a little, as if they didn't belong (the trill in measure 15 and the C-flat in the following measure are examples). These are just my personal preferences and don't necessarily reflect on poor composition skills.

You're obviously very talented at creating emotional piano pieces, and I love hearing your stuff on this site! Keep up the good work!

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11 hours ago, CalibriStandard said:

Amazing! This piece is truly wonderful,. How about you you add a C at the A flat at the bass line like this?

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Thanks for your comment!

As an alternative variant - why not? Only I am afraid that in such a low range this may slightly put pressure on the listener's ear.

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11 hours ago, Tónskáld said:

Beautiful piece, very emotional and delicate! I like how the deep rumblings contrast with the tinkling high notes, as if foreboding something ominous (like winter, perhaps). The piece is aptly named, good job!

Musically, however, it's a little confusing. I'm not entirely sure if we're in A-flat major or F minor, since you rely heavily on non-tonic notes throughout. (If that was your intent, then I congratulate you!) There were also some chromatics that jarred my ear a little, as if they didn't belong (the trill in measure 15 and the C-flat in the following measure are examples). These are just my personal preferences and don't necessarily reflect on poor composition skills.

You're obviously very talented at creating emotional piano pieces, and I love hearing your stuff on this site! Keep up the good work!

Thank you very much!
For me, first of all, it is important to follow the creative idea and artistic image.
Therefore, for me, tonality or reference tones were only a means of achievement, not an end in itself. Therefore, everything is possible here, perhaps this is not A-Flat Major, but simply in A-flat (Like Extended tonality)

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